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Global warming. Climate change is among the principal dangers facing people this century, and ocean levels are increasing dramatically.

Global warming. Climate change is among the principal dangers facing people this century, and ocean levels are increasing dramatically. XyAJN
Climate change is among the principal dangers facing people this century, and ocean levels are increasing dramatically. This essay will first suggest that the biggest problems caused by this phenomenon are the loss of land and the flooding of homes and then argue that pollution reduction and building flood protection are the most viable solutions. The foremost problems caused by climbing sea levels are that land is being lost and peoples’ residences are often flooded. As water levels rise, low-lying land is submerged and many countries become smaller. Furthermore, millions of people all over the world live in coastal areas, and if the sea rises by even a few feet, they are inundated with water and lose their property. The devastation brought about by this was clear for all to see during the 2011 Tsunami in Japan, in which millions of people were displaced. Possible solutions to these problems would be to reduce the amount of pollution being created and to build flood barriers. If each person reduces their carbon footprint, the negative effects on the environment will be reduced and this will mean that the water level will stop rising. Furthermore, flood defences, such as dikes, dams, and floodgates, could be built along coasts and waterways, thereby stopping the water reaching populated areas. The Netherlands is one of the most populated areas in the world and also one of the most vulnerable to flooding and they have successfully employed various flood defence systems. To conclude, stemming the rising tides caused by increasing global temperatures is one of the foremost challenges we face and it will ultimately lead to some countries losing landmass and many of the worlds’ cities being left underwater, but possible solutions could be to protect our environment and to utilise the flood prevention techniques already used by countries like Holland.
Climate
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is among the principal
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dangers
facing
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people
this century, and ocean
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levels
are increasing
dramatically
. This essay will
first
suggest that the biggest problems caused by this phenomenon are the loss of land and the flooding of homes and then argue that pollution reduction and building
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flood
protection are the most viable solutions.

The foremost problems caused by climbing sea
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levels
are that land is
being lost
and
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peoples’
residences are
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often
flooded. As
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water
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levels
rise, low-lying land
is submerged
and
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many
countries become smaller.
Furthermore
, millions of
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people
all over the world
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live
in coastal areas, and if the sea rises by even a few feet, they
are inundated
with
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water
and lose their property. The devastation brought about by this was
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clear
for all to
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see
during the 2011 Tsunami in Japan, in which millions of
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people
were displaced
.

Possible solutions to these problems would be to
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reduce
the amount of pollution
being created
and to build
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flood
barriers. If each person
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reduces
their carbon footprint, the
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negative
effects on the environment will be
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reduced
and this will mean that the
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water
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level
will
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stop
rising.
Furthermore
,
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flood
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defences
, such as dikes, dams, and floodgates, could
be built
along coasts and waterways, thereby stopping the
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water
reaching populated areas. The Netherlands is one of the most populated areas in the world and
also
one of the most vulnerable to
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flooding and
they have
successfully
employed various
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flood
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defence
systems.

To conclude
, stemming the rising tides caused by increasing global temperatures is one of the foremost challenges we face and it will
ultimately
lead to
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some
countries losing landmass and
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many
of the worlds’ cities being
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left
underwater,
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but
possible solutions could be to protect our environment and to
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utilise
the
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flood
prevention techniques already
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used
by countries like Holland.
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IELTS essay Global warming. Climate change is among the principal dangers facing people this century, and ocean levels are increasing dramatically.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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