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Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement? Give your own opinion on the issue. Use your own experience or an example to support your idea. You should write at least 250 words

Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Give your own opinion on the issue. Use your own experience or an example to support your idea. K0a69
Entertainment is necessary for all individuals to keep going in life. It can be in various forms and one of the types is playing. From my perspective, they are vital for both grown-ups and youngers. I completely agree with this notion and will be supporting this with my own experience. To begin with, primarily, playing sports is a great stress buster and it is obvious that in today's modern world there is hardly a human who is completely tension free. Hence, enjoying some games can help in diverting the mind from the regular routine. Secondly, there is always a child hidden in each soul, which needs some sort of fun, relaxation and appreciation. Moreover, playing with each other can help the person to showcase their hidden talent and getting prizes in competitive games can boost confidence. For instance, I was really fond of playing badminton in my school years but as time passed on I got accompanied by my studies, family and work-life which was making me depressed and stressed of regular schedule. Then got an opportunity to join a sports club nearby, I attend this regularly at the weekends and this one day keeps me going happily throughout the week. In addition to this, there can be numerous benefits of having recreation even at older ages. Firstly, a plethora of people are having sedentary jobs so if they choose to play athletics, this can be helpful to maintain a healthy lifestyle. Also worth mentioning, playing indoor games with family especially with children can really develop a healthy bond between them, consequently, parents can utilise this time to teach many things in a playful manner. For example, my father used to play a card game with me when I was young and would use to give valuable teachings through the game such as we should never cheat in any aspect, failure is a stepping stone to success, etc. Additionally, sport teaches children to be strong and take failures positively to work more hard from the very early years of growth. In conclusion, I opine, age is just a number and it should not stop a person from doing any activity which he enjoys. Likewise, a person should always take out time for their hobbies, so that they can live life to the fullest without taking it as a burden. However, it is our own responsibility to utilise hours wisely and enjoy them only in leisure.
Entertainment is necessary for all individuals to
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going in life. It can be in various forms and one of the types is
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. From my perspective, they are vital for both grown-ups and
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youngers
. I completely
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agree
with this notion and will be supporting this with my
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experience.

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with,
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,
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playing
sports is a great
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stress
buster and it is obvious that in
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today
's modern world there is hardly a human who is completely tension free.
Hence
, enjoying
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some
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games
can
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help
in diverting the mind from the regular routine.
Secondly
, there is always a child hidden in each soul, which needs
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some
sort of fun, relaxation and appreciation.
Moreover
,
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playing
with each other can
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help
the person to showcase their hidden talent and getting prizes in competitive
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games
can boost confidence.
For instance
, I was
really
fond of
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playing
badminton in my school years
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but
as time passed on I
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got
accompanied by my studies, family and work-life which was making me depressed and
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stressed
of regular schedule. Then
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got
an opportunity to
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join
a sports club nearby, I attend this
regularly
at the weekends and this one day
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keeps
me going
happily
throughout the week.

In addition
to this, there can be numerous benefits of having recreation even at older ages.
Firstly
, a plethora of
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people
are having sedentary jobs
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so
if they choose to play athletics, this can be helpful to maintain a healthy lifestyle.
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Also
worth mentioning,
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playing
indoor
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games
with family
especially
with children can
really
develop a healthy bond between them,
consequently
, parents can
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utilise
this time to teach
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many
things
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in a playful manner
.
For example
, my father
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used
to play a card game with me when I was young and would
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use
to give valuable teachings through the game such as we should never cheat in any aspect, failure is a stepping stone to success, etc.
Additionally
, sport teaches children to be strong and take failures
positively
to work more
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hard
from the
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very
early years of growth.

In conclusion
, I opine, age is
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just
a number and it should not
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stop
a person from doing any activity which he enjoys.
Likewise
, a person should always take out time for their hobbies,
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so
that they can
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live
life to the fullest without taking it as a burden.
However
, it is our
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own
responsibility to
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utilise
hours
wisely
and enjoy them
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only
in leisure.
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IELTS essay Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Give your own opinion on the issue. Use your own experience or an example to support your idea.

Essay
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4 paragraphs
405 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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