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Fulfilling our needs and desires make our lives better and satisfies our comfort zone .

Fulfilling our needs and desires make our lives better and satisfies our comfort zone. PVnPw

Fulfilling our needs and desires make our lives better and satisfies our comfort zone. However, we sometimes face the issue of doing the things which we do not really favor. As living in a communal world we definitely have to complete unfavorable tasks. I feel this way for personal and social reasons. Personally, right from the beginning of our lives we are being the reason of our parents sacrifice. Despite the fact that they love us even more than themselves, they usually have to do things without actually wanting to. For instance, when I was born my parents could not go abroad for a week for work because I could not stay without my mother. Consequently they abandoned the idea of leaving the country because of me. This example demonstrates the fact that we usually need to compromise. Socially, being an integral part of socialization we have to make a barrier against our dominant ego and care for others too. Imagine living without thinking about others. At first it seems that life would be easier but actually it would not. For example when a teacher shouts at you at school, you would like to tell a sharp word or somehow protect yourself, you need to keep silence and pretend that you feel sorry even if you do not. Or sometimes you have to talk to people whom you do not like just because they are your relatives or friends of friends. To cut the story short, we have to do some things even without enjoying it because we live in a world where everyone has their own role and sacrificing our own needs and desires we may show a benevolent behavior and help them

Fulfilling our You use this word too often, consider replacing it withuserightwishcommitmentdemandobligation
needs
 and desires This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 our This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
 better and satisfies our comfort zone. However
, we This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :in some instances
sometimes
 face the issue of doing the things which we do not really
 favor. “As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
 living in a communal world we definitely This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 complete unfavorable tasks. I feel this way for personal and social reasons.

Personally
, right from the beginning of our This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
 we are being the reason of our parents sacrifice. Despite the fact that they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admireadore
love
 us even more than themselves, they usually
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 do things without actually wanting to. For instance
, when I was born
 my parents could not go abroad for a week for work This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 I could not stay without my mother. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Consequently,
Consequently
 they abandoned the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtconceptnotion
idea
 of leaving the country This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of me. This example demonstrates the fact that we usually
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withuserightwishcommitmentdemandobligation
need
 to compromise.

Socially
, being an integral part of socialization we This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 a barrier against our dominant ego and care for others too. Imagine living without thinking about others. At The comma is probably missing here: "first, it".first, it
first it
 seems that life would be easier This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 actually it would not. For example
 when a teacher shouts at you at school, you would like to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :inform
tell
 a sharp word or somehow protect yourself, you You use this word too often, consider replacing it withuserightwishcommitmentdemandobligation
need
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 silence and pretend that you feel sorry even if you do not. Or This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :in some instances
sometimes
 you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 talk to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 whom you do not like This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 they are your relatives or friends of friends.

To This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :minimize
cut
 the story short, we This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 do This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 things even without enjoying it This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 we This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 in a world where everyone has their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 role and sacrificing our This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withuserightwishcommitmentdemandobligation
needs
 and desires we may This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 a benevolent behavior and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 them