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Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measures can governments and individuals take to respond to this problem? v.11

Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measures can governments and individuals take to respond to this problem? v. 11
It is understandable that a usable freshwater has been a restricted resource in some countries around the world. However, the requirement of using natural water has grown from the past until now and become a worldwide problem. Therefore, some causes and solutions to these issues will be discussed. The first cause to consider is that demanding of water resources is used for human consumption. This issue comes from urban and rural communities requiring water for drinking, sanitation and drainage. Particularly, most people consume 3, 000 litres of aqua per day, according to the Ted-Ed video. Moreover, the majority of people spend water in an additional area, especially in their households for cooking and gardening. In contrast, sensible solutions have been put forward to address the problems. People must limit indoor and outdoor uses of aqua individually, such as reducing washing garments, decreasing watering gardens, and cutting down washing cars. Thus, these activities allow people to reduce water uses. Furthermore, a further aspect of increasing water utilization is agricultural sectors. Agriculture withdraws the natural resources from rivers and ocean to maintain crops on the land and other products on the farm. This accounted for 70% of all water that is used in every area. Notably, requesting for water during drought period enhance the overall water operation on land. In addition, the booming demand for livestock products has escalated the demand for water from time to time. There are potential ways to tackle problems. To avoid over-watering crops, farmers carefully monitor the weather forecast and adapt their irrigation schedule to the current conditions. Actually, the government should create an embankment for farmers to capture rainfall for use in the farming land throughout the year. Consequently, they possibly have long term products in the field. In conclusion, a natural water is extremely vital resources for everyone. With this reason, the demand for water is increasing and turn into global issues. Although water consumption is a serious issue, there are steps that governments and individuals are able to reduce the problems.
It is understandable that a usable freshwater has been a restricted
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in
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some
countries around the world.
However
, the requirement of using natural
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water
has grown from the past until
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now
and become a worldwide
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problem
.
Therefore
,
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some
causes and solutions to these
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issues
will
be discussed
.

The
first
cause to consider is that demanding of
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water
resources is
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used
for human consumption. This
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issue
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comes
from urban and rural communities requiring
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water
for drinking, sanitation and drainage.
Particularly
, most
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people
consume 3, 000
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litres
of aqua per day, according to the Ted-Ed video.
Moreover
, the majority of
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people
spend
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water
in an additional area,
especially
in their households for cooking and gardening.
In contrast
, sensible solutions have
been put
forward to address the
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problems
.
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People
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must
limit indoor and outdoor
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uses
of aqua
individually
, such as reducing washing garments, decreasing watering gardens, and cutting down washing cars.
Thus
, these activities
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allow
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people
to
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reduce
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water
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uses
.

Furthermore
, a
further
aspect of increasing
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water
utilization is agricultural sectors. Agriculture withdraws the natural resources from rivers and ocean to maintain crops on the land and other products on the farm. This accounted for 70% of all
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water
that is
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used
in every area.
Notably
, requesting for
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water
during drought period enhance the
overall
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water
operation on land.
In addition
, the booming demand for livestock products has escalated the demand for
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water
from time to time. There are potential ways to tackle
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problems
. To avoid over-watering crops, farmers
carefully
monitor the weather forecast and adapt their irrigation schedule to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
conditions. Actually, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should create an embankment for farmers to capture rainfall for
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use
in the farming land throughout the year.
Consequently
, they
possibly
have long term products in the field.

In conclusion
, a natural
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water
is
extremely
vital resources for everyone. With this reason, the demand for
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water
is increasing and turn into global
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issues
. Although
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water
consumption is a serious
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issue
, there are steps that
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governments
and individuals are able to
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reduce
the
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problems
.
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IELTS essay Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measures can governments and individuals take to respond to this problem? v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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