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Following, the E-cigarettes debates, A students insights where published in the Herald Sun

Following, the E-cigarettes debates, A students insights where published in the Herald Sun aVdxY
As a Year 12 student, e-cigarettes have been worrying me since I was an 11 year old. In Year 5, I watched fascinated as my fellow 11 year old classmates blew smoke from what looked to be a lolly pen. Now, at 17 I listen to my peers discussing the latest vape devices, in the midst of a pandemic that attacks our lungs. And they say it’s not a problem! ! Really! ! Australian laws are lax, so e-cigarettes are perfectly legal. People say they help ease their tobacco addiction and are a safer option, US FDA research states ‘it is appropriate for the protection of public health". But is it worth the switch? The National Health and Medical Research Council advises that e-cigarettes contain chemicals and toxins such as formaldehyde and heavy metals, known to cause cancers and lung diseases. These studies suggest vaping may be just as deadly as smoking. Yet, Health minister, Greg Hunt disclosed ‘the Government's position on e-cigarettes remains unchanged and we will continue to take advice from medical experts’. So now, it’s a waiting game, until enough deaths sting the economy, to take action. The Americans, took action and banned flavoured e-cigarettes for good, once 2500 cases of lung disease and 55 deaths were reported associated with vaping. Is this what it has to come to for us to change? 55 deaths and 2500 ill Australians, sounds like a useless waste of life to me, don’t you think Greg? Public Health England, PHE, the government executive reported the risks of smoking e-cigarettes are 95% safer than tobacco smoking. Percentages are a merely chance, do you want to know something more reliable? Instead of promoting another disease stimulate, why don’t we use that money on resources to address and support tobacco smokers, rather than producing an alternative that can induce smoking behaviours within youth. Why should you invent another device, if research says it’s just as deadly, to help smokers? This is not help, it’s leading us into an epidemic like America. Maybe it’s the money, usually is. Ever since Quit educated us on the dangers of smoking, tobacco companies became endangered species leaving desperate billionaires to prey on youth for their next cash feast. Fishing kids in with an exotic smoky baits of strawberry cheesecake, cinnamon cookie custard, mermaids milk and even Hubba Bubbas grape bubble-gum, whilst the public knows little of the dangers. Cigarettes were cooler when less was known, it’ll only be a matter of time until someone discovers the real dangers of e-cigarettes and then they are deemed no longer safer too. If you honestly believe, e-cigarettes produce addicts, maybe you should think again. Kids are quite adventurous. They start on soft foods and move to junk foods and sweets, what’s not to say a little harmless smoke and then tobacco too. Australia doesn’t need to catch up with the world, and follow the UK, Russia, Italy who legalise ecigarettes, because we would only be joining the race to death.
As a
Year
12 student, e-cigarettes have been worrying me since I was an 11
year
old
. In
Year
5, I

watched
fascinated as my fellow 11
year
old
classmates blew smoke from what looked to be a lolly

pen.
Now
, at 17 I listen to my peers discussing the latest vape devices, in the midst of a pandemic that

attacks our lungs. And they say it’s not a problem! !
Really
! !

Australian laws are lax,
so
e-cigarettes are
perfectly
legal.
People
say they
help
ease
their tobacco

addiction and are a safer option, US FDA research states ‘it is appropriate for the protection of public

health
"
.

But
is it worth the switch? The National Health and Medical Research Council advises that e-cigarettes

contain chemicals and toxins such as formaldehyde and heavy metals, known to cause cancers and

lung diseases.

These studies suggest vaping may be
just
as deadly as
smoking
.
Yet
, Health minister, Greg Hunt

disclosed ‘the
Government
's position on e-cigarettes remains
unchanged and
we will continue to take

advice from medical experts’.
So
now
, it’s a waiting game, until
enough
deaths sting the economy, to

take action.

The Americans, took action and banned
flavoured
e-cigarettes for
good
, once 2500 cases of lung

disease and 55 deaths
were reported
associated with vaping. Is this what it
has to
come
to for us to

change
? 55 deaths and 2500 ill Australians, sounds like a useless waste of life to me, don’t you
think


Greg?

Public Health England, PHE, the
government
executive reported the
risks
of
smoking
e-cigarettes are

95% safer than tobacco
smoking
. Percentages are a
merely chance
, do you want to know something

more reliable?
Instead
of promoting another disease stimulate, why don’t we
use
that money on

resources to address and support tobacco smokers,
rather
than producing an alternative that can

induce
smoking
behaviours
within youth. Why should you invent another device, if research says it’s

just
as deadly, to
help
smokers? This is not
help
, it’s leading us into an epidemic like America.

Maybe it’s the money,
usually
is. Ever since Quit educated us on the
dangers
of
smoking
, tobacco

companies
became endangered species leaving desperate billionaires to prey on youth for their
next


cash feast. Fishing kids in with an exotic smoky baits of strawberry cheesecake, cinnamon cookie

custard, mermaids milk and even
Hubba
Bubbas
grape bubble-gum, whilst the public knows
little
of

the
dangers
.

Cigarettes were cooler when less
was known
, it’ll
only
be a matter of time until someone discovers

the real
dangers
of
e-cigarettes and
then they
are deemed
no longer safer too.

If you
honestly
believe, e-cigarettes produce addicts, maybe you should
think
again.

Kids are quite adventurous. They
start
on soft foods and
move
to junk foods and sweets, what’s not to

say a
little
harmless smoke and then tobacco too.

Australia doesn’t need to catch up with the world, and follow the UK, Russia, Italy who
legalise
ecigarettes
,

because
we would
only
be joining the race to death.
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IELTS essay Following, the E-cigarettes debates, A students insights where published in the Herald Sun

Essay
  American English
12 paragraphs
499 words
5.5
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