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Fathers are equally reponsibly their children as mothers.Do you agree or disagree

Fathers are equally reponsibly their children as mothers. 73ogA
Infants have a reflection of both their mother and father characteristics. Some people believe that motherhood is more crucial for a baby than fatherhood, while on the contrary other believes fatherhood is equally as vital for them. This essay will discuss, why the latter is equivalent to motherhood for an infant's life. Since the archaic period, we have encountered that no is as important a juvenile than his or her mom. This is mainly because of two main reasons. Firstly, a baby is bought into existence after 9 months of nurturing in her womb. Due to this reason, children always have a natural connection with them. Secondly, in the first initial years of the infant, a woman plays a guiding influence on her baby to understand the morals of the world. To illustrate, Babies, from their birth to the age of at least 10, looks up to them before doing anything and even when he or she has committed a mistake, listens to their mom and doesn't repeat the mistake again in most of the cases. Therefore, motherhood would always play a key role in an adolescent's life because of the bond that is formed in the initial 9 months of pregnancy and also due to the fact that she acts as a guardian angel for the infant in their initial years. Conversely, this doesn't mean that fatherhood is not important. Father's play an important role in the development process as well. At the time of pregnancy, women tend to get irritated, feel sick and faces many more symptoms. At this time they require extreme care and backing, which their husbands or boyfriends provide in terms of supporting and providing them with all the aids that are required. This is often neglected by society as it is indirectly affecting the baby's health. Additionally, the father provides them with both mental and moral strength when he or she fails to agree with their mother. For example, in my childhood, my mom was too protective of me and didn't back me when I asked her whether I can go on a trip from school. When I complained to my father, that I want to go on this trip very badly, he convinced his other half to allow me for the trip. As a result of these moral boosters and the indirect care provided by fatherhood, ultimately balances the kid's development.
Infants have a reflection of both their mother and father characteristics.
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people
believe that motherhood is more crucial for a baby than
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fatherhood
, while
on the contrary
other believes
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fatherhood
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equally as
vital for them. This essay will discuss, why the latter is equivalent to motherhood for an infant's life.

Since the archaic period, we have encountered that
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no
is as
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important
a juvenile than
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his or her
mom. This is
mainly
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because
of two main reasons.
Firstly
, a baby is
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bought
into existence after 9 months of nurturing in her womb. Due to this reason, children always have a natural connection with them.
Secondly
, in the
first
initial years of the infant, a woman plays a guiding influence on her baby to understand the morals of the world. To illustrate,
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Babies
, from their birth to the age of at least 10, looks up to them
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before
doing anything and even when he or she has committed a mistake, listens to their mom and doesn't repeat the mistake again in most of the cases.
Therefore
, motherhood would always play a key role in an adolescent's life
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because
of the bond that
is formed
in the initial 9 months of pregnancy and
also
due to the fact that she acts as a guardian angel for the infant in their initial years.

Conversely
, this doesn't mean that
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fatherhood
is not
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important
. Father's play an
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important
role in the development process
as well
. At the time of pregnancy, women tend to
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get
irritated, feel sick and faces
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many
more symptoms. At this time they require extreme care and backing, which their husbands or boyfriends provide in terms of supporting and providing them with all the aids that
are required
. This is
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often
neglected by society as it is
indirectly
affecting the baby's health.
Additionally
, the father provides them with both mental and moral strength when he or she fails to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with their mother.
For example
, in my childhood, my mom was too protective of me and didn't back me when I asked her whether I can go on a trip from school. When I complained to my father, that I want to go on this trip
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very
badly
, he convinced his other half to
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allow
me for the trip.
As a result
of these moral boosters and the indirect care provided by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fatherhood
,
ultimately
balances the kid's development.
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IELTS essay Fathers are equally reponsibly their children as mothers.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
398 words
6.0
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