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Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up

Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up y6XE
Gone are the days when people thought that mother is solely responsible for bringing up her children, however, nowadays both mother as well as father plays an equal contribution for raising up their children. In this contemporary world, there is heated debate about the fact whether it is the sole responsibility of mother to nourish her child or both the parents should emphasize on the growth of their children. A lion share of society agrees with latter statement. As per my perspective, it is the duty of both parents to look after their children and make them a well social being persons. To embark on, I see eye to eye with the central idea that father and mother should play an equal and essential role in bringing up their children. Moreover, parents are the one who always wish to make their children a social well being. Apart from this, both father and mother have enriched experience of various ups and downs of life and guide their children well how to face challenges and struggle in the hard times. Furthermore, they are the first teachers of their children and juveniles also learn the things which they have been guided by their parents more rapidly. However, single parent is not enough strong to manage all such things properly and ultimately results lacks in nourishment of a child. Shedding lights on the above said reasons, it is clear that it is an obligation of both parents to foster the growth of their child. It is rightly said that if mother and father mutually decide to have a baby then it is also the commitment of both ones to breed their children with each other support and guidance so that, they can shine the name of their parents. Having said that, I would like to emphasize on the statement that both parents should concentrate on the personal development of their children. To recapitulate, although single parent can nourish his/her own babies, yet to my mind, it is the job of both parents to support, guide, educate and feed their children.
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the days when
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people
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thought
that
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mother
is
solely
responsible for bringing up her
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children
,
however
, nowadays both
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mother
as
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well
as
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father
plays an equal contribution for raising up their
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children
. In this contemporary world, there
is heated
debate about the fact whether it is the sole responsibility of
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mother
to nourish her child or both the
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parents
should emphasize on the growth of their
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children
. A lion share of society
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agrees
with latter statement. As per my perspective, it is the duty of both
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parents
to look after their
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children
and
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make
them a
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well
social being persons.

To embark on, I
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see
eye to eye with the central
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idea
that
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father
and
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mother
should play an equal and essential role in bringing up their
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children
.
Moreover
,
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parents
are the one who always wish to
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make
their
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children
a social
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well being
. Apart from this, both
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father
and
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mother
have enriched experience of various ups and downs of life and guide their
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children
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well
how to face challenges and struggle in the
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hard
times.
Furthermore
, they are the
first
teachers of their
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children
and juveniles
also
learn the things which they have
been guided
by their
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parents
more
rapidly
.
However
, single
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parent
is not
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enough
strong to manage all such things
properly
and
ultimately
results lacks in nourishment of a child.

Shedding lights on the above said reasons, it is
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clear
that it is an obligation of both
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parents
to foster the growth of their child. It is
rightly
said that if
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mother
and
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father
mutually
decide to have a baby then it is
also
the commitment of both ones to breed their
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children
with each other support and guidance
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so
that, they can shine the name of their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
. Having said that, I would like to emphasize on the statement that both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
should concentrate on the personal development of their children.

To recapitulate, although single
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parent
can nourish his/her
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
babies,
yet
to my mind, it is the job of both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
to support, guide, educate and feed their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
.

IELTS essay Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
346 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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