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Family is the core of our lives.

Family is the core of our lives. LrE0G
Family is the core of our lives. It is the trigger of the most sincere feelings. Consequently the members of the family are having great impact on each other. Another definition of family is our circle of friends, which also contains the action of having impacts on one another. Although I am quite a sociable person, I think that family is the main factor of influencing their young adults. My view is based on personal and phsychological reasons. Personally, before getting older children are taught some primary things from their parents like saying hello to people, respecting old people and so on. In every stage of life, parents tend to have deep conversations about life, about them and this world. Every word can play a huge role in the thinking of the child as they do not have the well-formed and self-controlled ways of making decisions and acting in various situations. I still have a lot to learn from my parents as I have not got the peak of my self-thinking and decision-making. And I feel the influence of my parents and family members on me in every step I do. Phsychologically, young adults have the tendency to repeat their parents actions. They consider their family members as role models for them and try to follow the way of their. For example my little sister always copies what I do and even while making decisions she thinks the way I do. I can imply that I have my small proportion of impact on her as a family member. To cut the story short, I firmly believe that family is the number one influence-maker and compared to friends, they are more likely to be the ones whom young adults are going to follow and reflect their own ideas and steps one day.
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is the core of our
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lives
. It is the
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trigger
of
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the most sincere
feelings.
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Consequently
the members of the
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family
are having great impact on each other. Another definition of
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family
is our circle of friends, which
also
contains the action of having impacts on one another. Although I am quite a sociable person, I
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think
that
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family
is the main factor of influencing their young adults. My view
is based
on personal and
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phsychological
reasons.

Personally
,
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before
getting older children
are taught
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some
primary things from their
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parents
like saying hello to
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people
, respecting
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old
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people
and
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so
on. In every stage of life,
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parents
tend to have deep conversations about life, about them and this world. Every word can play a huge role in the thinking of the child as they do not have the well-formed and self-controlled ways of making decisions and acting in various situations. I
still
have a lot to learn from my
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parents
as I have not
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got
the peak of my self-thinking and decision-making. And I feel the influence of my
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parents
and
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family
members on me in every step I do.

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Phsychologically
, young adults have the tendency to repeat their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
actions. They consider their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
members as role models for them and try to follow the way of their.
For example
my
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
sister always copies what I do and even while making decisions she
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thinks
the way I do. I can imply that I have my
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
proportion of impact on her as a
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family
member.

To
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cut
the story short, I
firmly
believe that
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family
is the number one influence-maker and compared to friends, they are more likely to be the ones whom young adults are going to follow and reflect their
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own
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ideas
and steps one day.
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IELTS essay Family is the core of our lives.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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