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Everybody should be allowed admission to university or college programs regardless of their of academic ability.

In our country, the education system has always been weakened by contrast with the system of other countries. I agree with the concept of allowing anyone to be admitted to university or college regardless of their academic ability. And I say this because most students are inconsistent and subject to different circumstances during their years of education that influence their grades at some other stage. I also believe that a student with low grades in the first year can get high grades in the second year and be as smart as the top of the class. The college, the location, and the environment around them, the exposure they get, and many other conditions play a major role in their development. I would like to demonstrate this by taking an illustration of my own years of study in pre-university and undergraduate studies. Even though I got 54 percent in my 12th grade, I got 75 percent in my bachelor's, which was a lot higher than my 12th grade. And this happened because I went to a new place, I met new people, I fit into a new atmosphere that made me extremely motivated to study hard and to become a more informed person. School, my major, interesting topics, lectures, have made me search for more understanding and good grades. I, therefore, think that everybody should be able to enter university.
In our country, the education system has always
been weakened
by contrast with the system of other countries. I
agree
with the concept of allowing anyone to
be admitted
to university or college regardless of their academic ability. And I say this
because
most students are inconsistent and subject to
different
circumstances during their years of education that influence their
grades
at
some
other stage. I
also
believe that a student with low
grades
in the
first
year
can
get
high
grades
in the second
year
and be as smart as the top of the
class
. The college, the location, and
the environment around them
, the exposure they
get
, and
many
other conditions play a major role in their development. I would like to demonstrate this by taking an illustration of my
own
years of study in
pre-university
and undergraduate studies.
Even though
I
got
54 percent in my 12th
grade
, I
got
75 percent in my bachelor's, which was a lot higher than my 12th
grade
. And this happened
because
I went to a new place, I met new
people
, I fit into a new atmosphere that made me
extremely
motivated to study
hard
and to become a more informed person. School, my major, interesting topics, lectures, have made me search for more understanding and
good
grades
. I,
therefore
,
think
that everybody should be able to enter university.
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IELTS essay Everybody should be allowed admission to university or college programs regardless of their of academic ability.

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