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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is a fact that there are a lot of languages in this world, but every year several of the languages just disappear. A group of people believe that the extinction of some languages is not a crucial problem since communication will be more effective with fewer languages. Although some people think that the extinction of some languages is not a serious problem, I do believe that the diversity of the world languages has a lot of benefits for the individual and the society as well. To begin with, it is undeniable that out of hundreds of languages that have existed, few languages extinct every year. It is believed that the disappearance was due to the globalisation and the westernisation of the European and American, which have forced people to communicate in International languages such as English, German or French. Other people have an opinion that the extinction of the languages is not a serious threat to the world since most of them that die out are minority languages which are spoken by several people. Therefore they would not make a significant impact on the world. Besides that, the usage of several international languages has made business interaction or diplomatic negotiation among nations or continents become easier. On the other hand, the uncountable number of languages that have existed shows the uniqueness of the world cultures. It is necessary to maintain the diversity of the world languages since each of the languages represents the identity of a community or a tribe. Besides that, although some of the languages might only be spoken by several people, it has an important function. Many of the traditional myths are written or documented in the minority languages, and if they die out, then the culture would also be lost. In conclusion, I personally disagree with the opinion that with only several languages that exist in the world, life will be easier. I believe that the variety of languages shows the richness of the world civilizations and they should be passed to the next generation.
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,
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every year several of the
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just
disappear. A group of
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people
believe that the extinction of
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some
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languages
is not a crucial problem since communication will be more effective with fewer
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. Although
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some
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people
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think
that the extinction of
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some
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is not a serious problem, I do believe that the diversity of the
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world
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has
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a lot of
benefits for the individual and the society
as well
.

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begin
with, it is undeniable that out of hundreds of
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languages
that have existed, few
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extinct every year. It
is believed
that the disappearance was due to the
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globalisation
and the
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westernisation
of the European and American, which have forced
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people
to communicate in International
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languages
such as English, German or French. Other
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people
have an opinion that the extinction of the
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languages
is not a serious threat to the
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world
since most of them that
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die
out are minority
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languages
which
are spoken
by several
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people
.
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they would not
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make
a significant impact on the
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world
.
Besides
that, the usage of several international
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languages
has made business interaction or diplomatic negotiation among nations or continents become easier.

On the other hand
, the uncountable number of
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languages
that have existed
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shows
the uniqueness of the
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world
cultures. It is necessary to maintain the diversity of the
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world
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languages
since each of the
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languages
represents the identity of a community or a tribe.
Besides
that, although
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some of the
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might
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only
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by several
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people
, it has an
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important
function.
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Many
of the traditional myths
are written
or documented in the minority
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languages
, and if they
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die
out, then the culture would
also
be lost
.

In conclusion
, I
personally
disagree with the opinion that with
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only
several
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languages
that exist in the
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world
, life will be easier. I believe that the variety of
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languages
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shows
the richness of the
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world
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civilizations and
they should
be passed
to the
next
generation.
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IELTS essay Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. with this opinion?

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