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ETS OFFICIAL IBT TEST-5(SMART CARS)

ETS OFFICIAL IBT TEST-5(SMART CARS) 9LGrx
The passage states that technology will provide smart cars and discusses about the benefits to make driving safer, quicker and less expensive. However, the professor refutes each of the points made in the passage. First, the reading claims that smart cars will decrease accidents and save lives. The professor refutes this point by saying that failure of technology and the tightly packed roads with smart cars will increase the chances of accidents more than today. Second, the article posits that smart cars will lessen commuting time and make the driving quicker. However the professor says that it will not decrease commuting time, as history shows that the more convenient vehicles, the more and more people drive it. Increased number of driving will make the road packed with traffic. Hence it can not lessen the commuting time. Third, the reading says that it will be less expensive. The professor opposes this point by saying that use of technologies and more accidents in case of failure technologies can not make it less expensive. The cost for repair and replacement of parts will be more in comparison to conventional cars.
The passage states that
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technology
will provide
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smart
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cars
and
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discusses about the
benefits to
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make
driving safer, quicker and less expensive.
However
, the
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professor
refutes each of the points made in the passage.

First
, the reading claims that
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smart
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cars
will decrease accidents and save
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
. The
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professor
refutes this point by saying that failure of
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technology
and the
tightly
packed roads with
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smart
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cars
will increase the chances of accidents more than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
.

Second, the article posits that
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smart
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cars
will lessen commuting time and
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make
the driving quicker.
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However
the
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professor
says that it will not decrease commuting time, as history
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
that the more convenient vehicles, the more and more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
drive it. Increased number of driving will
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make
the road packed with traffic.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Hence
it can not lessen the commuting time.

Third, the reading says that it will be less expensive. The
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professor
opposes this point by saying that
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use
of
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technologies
and more accidents in case of failure
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technologies
can not
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make
it less expensive. The cost for repair and replacement of parts will be more
in comparison
to conventional
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cars
.
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IELTS essay ETS OFFICIAL IBT TEST-5(SMART CARS)

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
187 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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