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essay TPO-23 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. v.2

essay TPO-23 - Independent Writing Task In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. v. 2
Throughout history, work has played a prominent role in all societies. The significance of working is to make progress in tasks and earn money for livelihood. There are two ways to do the work, risk making mistakes or make sure everything is accepted. Some people may hold the view that it is better to be fast notwithstanding the risks. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that it is necessary to work slowly while gain benefit from the accuracy of the task. As far as I am concerned, working with a lower velocity is more important. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons. The most significant reason is that an individual should enjoy what he is doing. When he satisfied with the work, there will be better results in work and his private life. To illustrate this, I would like to mention the available statistics on the issue. According to statistics, employees that are satisfied with their jobs, have a better personal life than the others. Moreover, the results show their employers are glad to have them. This depicts that satisfaction is a fundamental point in work. Therefore, a worker should do his job slower to enjoy it and genuinely percept the true meaning of his work. Another reason which deserves some words here is that the importance of work is the outcome of it. After a work is done, the result will perpetuate and stay as the conclusion of the task. Hence, doing job slower will result in fewer errors and makes the job remarkable. In contrast, both the work and the outcome of it will become deteriorated. Although the aforementioned reasons are the first ones that cross the mind at first glance, they are by no means the only reasons available. In fact, there is another subtle point which must be borne in mind. The point is that there is usually no assigned deadline for a task to be done and there is no rival to compete ordinarily, however people do their job hasty and do not think about the consequences. As an example, when I was a sophomore student at Sharif University of technology, I had this mechanical design course, which was mandatory for our department students to enroll. The professor demanded the students to do an immense term project, which constituted a good portion of the final grade. astoundingly, the professor did not announce a date for the project submission. Since I believe in working with high focus, I started my project early and continued it until the end of the semester. The benefit was that I was relax during the project, I did it on time, and I got the top mark for the project among my classmates. On the other hand, the students did it late in the semester. The outcomes of their projects were full of errors and as a whole seemed erroneous. In addition, they got low grades with respect to their effort on this particular homework. This example shows me despite the deadlines, people tend to work fast and do not care about the results in the end. To wrap it up, doing your tasks slowly is better than doing it rapidly. Contemplating all the aforementioned reasons one soon realize that working slowly will satisfy the employee and the employer, deduces the best result, and eliminates the deadline requirement for a task. Consequently, it is highly recommended that there should be a seminar for employees and employers, where to teach them to slow down the apparent progression rate of the projects and monitor how the job is done; they should not only concentrate on doing the task as an obligatory burden. In conclusion, Slowness is very important in life.
Throughout history,
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work
has played a prominent role in all societies. The significance of
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working
is to
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make
progress in
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tasks
and earn money for livelihood. There are two ways to do the
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work
,
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risk
making mistakes or
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make
sure everything is
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accepted
.
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Some
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people
may hold the view that it is
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better
to be
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fast
notwithstanding the
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risks
.
However
,
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some
others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that it is necessary to
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work
slowly
while gain benefit from the accuracy of the
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task
. As far as I
am concerned
,
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working
with a lower velocity is more
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important
. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.

The most significant
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reason
is that an individual should enjoy what he is
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doing
. When he satisfied with the
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work
, there will be
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better
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results
in
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work
and his private life. To illustrate this, I would like to mention the available statistics on the issue. According to statistics, employees that
are satisfied
with their
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jobs
, have a
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better
personal life than the others.
Moreover
, the
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results
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show
their employers are glad to have them. This depicts that satisfaction is a fundamental point in
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work
.
Therefore
, a worker should do his
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job
slower to enjoy it and
genuinely
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percept
the true meaning of his work.

Another
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reason
which deserves
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some
words here is that the importance of
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work
is the outcome of it. After a
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work
is done
, the
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result
will perpetuate and stay as the conclusion of the
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task
.
Hence
,
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doing
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job
slower will
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result
in fewer errors and
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makes
the
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job
remarkable.
In contrast
, both the
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work
and the outcome of it will become deteriorated.

Although the aforementioned
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reasons
are the
first
ones that cross the mind at
first
glance, they are by no means the
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only
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reasons
available. In fact, there is another subtle point which
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must
be borne
in mind. The point is that there is
usually
no assigned deadline for a
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task
to
be done
and there is no rival to compete
ordinarily
,
however
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people
do their
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job
hasty and do not
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think
about the consequences. As an example, when I was a sophomore
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student
at Sharif University of technology, I had this mechanical design course, which was mandatory for our department
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students
to enroll. The professor demanded the
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students
to do an immense term
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project
, which constituted a
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good
portion of the final grade.
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astoundingly
, the professor did not announce a date for the
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project
submission. Since I believe in
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working
with high focus, I
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started
my
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project
early and continued it until the
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end
of the semester. The benefit was that I was
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relax
during the
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project
, I did it on time, and I
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got
the top mark for the
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project
among my classmates.
On the other hand
, the
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students
did it late in the semester. The outcomes of their
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projects
were full of errors and as a whole seemed erroneous.
In addition
, they
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got
low grades with respect to their effort on this particular homework. This example
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shows
me despite the deadlines,
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people
tend to
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work
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fast
and do not care about the
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results
in the
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end
.

To wrap it up,
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doing
your
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tasks
slowly
is
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better
than
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doing
it
rapidly
. Contemplating all the aforementioned
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reasons
one
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soon
realize that
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working
slowly
will satisfy the employee and the employer, deduces the best
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result
, and eliminates the deadline requirement for a
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task
.
Consequently
, it is
highly
recommended that there should be a seminar for employees and employers, where to teach them to slow down the apparent progression rate of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
projects
and monitor how the
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job
is done
; they should not
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only
concentrate on
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doing
the
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task
as an obligatory burden.
In conclusion
, Slowness is
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very
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important
in life.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
58Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay essay TPO-23 - Independent Writing Task In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
626 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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