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Essay on whether advertising encourages an individual to purchase commodities that they might not actually require

Essay on whether advertising encourages an individual to purchase commodities that they might not actually require JVrYj
I agree that advertising encourages an individual to purchase commodities that they might not actually require. Humans are by nature curious animals and advertisements are displayed in such a manner that piques our curiosity. For example, the previous day while I was scrolling through my Instagram feed, I noticed an item labeled as a banana bread carrier. Merely by seeing the item, my curiosity was aroused. I wanted to know more about the product and clicked on the notice. Before I knew what I was doing, I had already ordered the item even though I had never previously baked any banana bread. Similarly, if an item is being advertised in relation to a television program, there is a high tendency that the item although not needed, may be purchased by over 60% if its viewers. Items associated with the television show, Friends, is such a case. Even though people already own enough clothes, they go out of their way just to purchase an additional sweater if it contains an image of the characters. This is another example of publicity encouraging humans to purchase products that are actually not needed by them. It is true that the media informs us about new products. The previous instance regarding the banana bread carrier is such a new product that may slightly improve a baker's life. However, it is a clear illustration of an item that is not at all required for the daily functioning of human beings. Thus, not all new products that are novel, improve our lives. We should watch advertisements but make careful judgments prior to purchasing an item as all publicity is aimed at making a sale regardless of whether the product is necessary or not.
I
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agree
that advertising encourages an individual to
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purchase
commodities that they might not actually require.

Humans are by nature curious animals and advertisements
are displayed
in such a manner that piques our curiosity.
For example
, the previous day while I was scrolling through my Instagram feed, I noticed an
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item
labeled as a banana bread carrier.
Merely
by seeing the
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item
, my curiosity
was aroused
. I wanted to know more about the
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product
and clicked on the notice.
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Before
I knew what I was doing, I had already ordered the
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item
even though
I had never previously baked any banana bread.

Similarly
, if an
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item
is
being advertised
in relation to a television program, there is a high tendency that the
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item
although not needed, may be
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purchased
by over 60% if its viewers.

Items associated with the television
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show
, Friends, is such a case.
Even though
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people
already
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own
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enough
clothes, they go out of their way
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just
to
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purchase
an additional sweater if it contains an image of the characters. This is another example of publicity encouraging humans to
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purchase
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products
that are actually not needed by them.

It is true that the media informs us about new
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products
. The previous instance regarding the banana bread carrier is such a new
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product
that may
slightly
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improve
a baker's life.
However
, it is a
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clear
illustration of an
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item
that is
not at all required for the daily functioning of human beings.
Thus
, not all new
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products
that are novel,
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improve
our
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lives
.

We should
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watch
advertisements
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but
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make
careful judgments prior to purchasing an
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item
as all publicity
is aimed
at making a sale regardless of whether the
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product
is necessary or not.
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IELTS essay Essay on whether advertising encourages an individual to purchase commodities that they might not actually require

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
286 words
6.0
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