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The story happened when I entered high school. I used to be a student with good results in middle school.

The story happened when I entered high school. I used to be a student with good results in middle school. QlXM3
Although I knew lying was a bad thing, I lied about the times I had skipped school with my parents. The story happened when I entered high school. I used to be a student with good results in middle school. On the contrary when I went to high school I changed my study environment, met more buddy consequently I started to change. I skipped school with my buddy on the contrary told my parents that I went to extra classes and asked for more money to pay tuition fees actually it was to hang out with my buddy. My academic situation at the beginning of 10th grade was getting worse and worse. When my mom asked about this, I lied that the high school program was difficult, I hadn't had time to adapt, and she didn't understand me. Changed my mentality to become a rebel who doesn't listen to anyone. The times I messed up, I was asked by teacher to write a review, I forged my mother's signature to return it to my teacher. One day I was caught by my mom while going out with my buddy. When I got home, my mom only asked me why I left school to go out, at that time I was still stubborn and told the teacher to leave school. Since that day, my mom and I didn’t talk for a while, I clearly saw her sad and I saw her cry. At that moment, I regretted consequently much that I decided to apologize to my mom and admit my mistake. I determined to study more and now I have passed the school that I love that's what I did to make my mom happy and proud of me.
Although I knew lying was a
bad
thing, I lied about the
times
I had skipped
school
with my parents. The story happened when I entered high
school
. I
used
to be a student with
good
results in middle
school
.
On the contrary
when I went to high
school
I
changed
my study environment, met more
buddy
consequently
I
started
to
change
. I skipped
school
with my
buddy
on the contrary
told
my parents that I went to extra classes and
asked
for more money to pay tuition fees actually it was to hang out with my
buddy
. My academic situation at the beginning of 10th grade was getting worse and worse. When my
mom
asked
about this, I lied that the high
school
program was difficult, I hadn't had
time
to adapt, and she didn't understand me.
Changed
my mentality to become a rebel who doesn't listen to anyone. The
times
I messed up, I was
asked
by teacher to write a review, I forged my mother's signature to return it to my teacher. One day I
was caught
by my
mom
while going out with my
buddy
. When I
got
home, my
mom
only
asked
me why I
left
school
to go out, at that
time
I was
still
stubborn and
told
the teacher to
leave
school
. Since that day, my
mom
and I didn’t talk for a while, I
clearly
saw
her sad and I
saw
her cry. At that moment, I regretted
consequently
much that I decided to apologize to my
mom
and admit my mistake. I determined to study more and
now
I have passed the
school
that I
love
that's what I did to
make
my
mom
happy and proud of me.
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IELTS essay The story happened when I entered high school. I used to be a student with good results in middle school.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
288 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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