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Environmenlol problems ore loo big for individuol countiles ond individuol persons fo oddress. ln olher wotds, we hove reoched fhe sloge where lhe only woy to prolecl lhe environrnenl is ol on inlernolionol level. To whot exfenl do you ogree or disogree wifh fhis opinion?

Environmenlol problems ore loo big for individuol countiles ond individuol persons fo oddress. ln olher wotds, we hove reoched fhe sloge where lhe only woy to prolecl lhe environrnenl is ol on inlernolionol level. To whot exfenl do you ogree or disogree wifh fhis opinion? 7a2aX
Climate change is a phenomenon affecting all people in all walks of life, from individual citizens to whole countries and huge multinational companies. Therefore, ldisagree with the notion that the only way to address the environmental problems is at international level. lfirmly believe that this colossal problem can only be handled if all individuals contribute; all governments take steps at national level and also join hands at an international level. Undoubtedly, gigantic steps need to be taken, and are being taken at the international level. The 'COP2f in Paris in November 2015 is a step in this direction. The aim of 'COP2f is well known: to reach a universal agreement limiting the rise in global average temperature to 2'C above pre-industrial levels. All nations are realizing that climate change is one of the greatest challenges faced by mankind today. Many steps can be taken at the national level. Governments can aware people of the benefits of using energy efficient devices. For instance, this year government of lndia gave 2 LED bulbs to each government employee at Rs 10/- each under the "Prakash Path" scheme. The cost of each bulb is Rs 400/-. The cost will be recovered by adding a very small amount in each month's electricity bill for about a year. ln about 100 cities, the streetlights have been replaced with LED bulbs, which is a saving of a huge amount per day. LED bulbs use a tenth of electricity as compared to other bulbs. Once people realize that by using LED bulbs, their electricity bills will reduce, they will be prepared to make the initial heavy investment also. Although the international and national level steps are imperative, it is also a fact that individual action combined with governmental action can do a lot more to prevent climate change than if individual citizens were not involved. ln a world of six billion people, if everyone stopped wasting water, disposed off their rubbish properly, started accepting recycled material and stopped succumbing to consumerism, then it would go a long way in solving the problem of environment. Summing up, individual citizens cannot sit back and say it is someone else's responsibility to protect the environment; we must all play our part - individual citizens and governments at the national an
Climate
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is a phenomenon affecting all
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in all walks of life, from
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countries and huge multinational
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companies
.
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address the environmental problems is at
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level
.
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lfirmly
believe that this colossal problem can

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join
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at an
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level.

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steps
need to
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international
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level
. The 'COP2f in

Paris in November 2015 is a
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step
in this direction. The aim of 'COP2f is well known: to reach a universal

agreement limiting the rise in global average temperature to 2'C above
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pre-industrial
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levels
. All nations
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is one of the greatest challenges faced by mankind
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today
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level
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people
of the benefits of using

energy efficient devices.
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employee at Rs 10/- each under the
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Prakash Path
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scheme. The cost of each
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is Rs 400/-. The cost will

be recovered
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very
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about 100

cities, the streetlights have
been replaced
with LED
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bulbs
, which is a saving of a huge amount per day. LED

bulbs
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a tenth of electricity as compared to other
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. Once
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people
realize that by using LED bulbs,

their electricity bills will
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, they will
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make
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.

Although the
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and
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are imperative, it is
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combined with governmental action can do a lot more to
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prevent
climate
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than if
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were not involved.
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a world of six billion
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, if everyone
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stopped
wasting water, disposed off their

rubbish
properly
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started
accepting recycled material and
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stopped
succumbing to consumerism, then it

would go a long way in solving the problem of environment.

Summing up,
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individual
citizens cannot sit back and say it is someone else's responsibility to protect the

environment; we
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must
all play our part
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IELTS essay Environmenlol problems ore loo big for individuol countiles ond individuol persons fo oddress. ln olher wotds, we hove reoched fhe sloge where lhe only woy to prolecl lhe environrnenl is ol on inlernolionol level. To whot exfenl do you ogree or disogree wifh fhis opinion?

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