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Some argue that education provided by family is of greater importance than education from school. I completely disagree with this statement. In my opinion, school education provides factual information and cover several subjects which family most likely cannot do due to lack of education and teaching skills. Firstly, schools make sure that children and young adults take part of relevant knowledge that will benefit them in the future. All classes that are offered in schools serve a purpose and are planned in a way that will facilitate the learning process greatly. Moreover, teaching methods used are generally based on science and are therefore very effective. For instance, schools provide lectures, seminars and test which is a good way to ensure that students have gone through sufficient education. Secondly, education in schools is provided by people who have attended higher education in order to work. This ensures that student needs are meet the best way possible. In addition, teachers also have no specific agendas except for teaching compared to family members, which makes it easier to provide an education. For example, teachers know how to handle students with learning difficulties and have the ability to adjust their ways of teaching to benefit these students which family most likely cannot. In conclusion, education received from school is significantly more important compared to what is taught from family member because schools provide relevant knowledge and hold classes that serves a purpose. In addition, schools have qualified teachers that know how to meet the needs of all kinds of students compared to family.
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serve a purpose and
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with learning difficulties and have the ability to adjust their ways of
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to benefit these
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most likely cannot.

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IELTS essay education you recieve from your family

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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