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Due to the effect of globalization , the culture of some countries are influenced by others. some think that it is a positive development , others consider r this can be harmful. agree or dis agree

Due to the effect of globalization, the culture of some countries are influenced by others. some think that it is a positive development, others consider r this can be harmful. agree or dis agree YLdnm

Nowadays the whole world has come up with a single platform due to the advancement in technology. The countries are exchanging their cultures and beliefs. This is a highly debatable issue that whether this trend is beneficial or harmful for a country. In my opinion, it has both positive and negative impacts on life on people. Firstly, it helps in improving the trade between two countries, which results in better economic condition of the country. For example, it encourages the investment between two nations and it also opens the ways of employment in foreign countries. Secondly, it is also helpful in enhancing our knowledge about fashion of other nations. As, by getting knowledge about civilization and language of other nations, we can easily settle in that country. This trend has a disadvantage also. As sometimes it can dominate on the civilization of a particular nation. For example, the trade between India and China has dominated in the market of Indian goods. As the things made in China are thought to be more durable and less costly, so people of India prefer to buy China made things as compared to their personal products. Moreover, cultural exchange between two countries may prove harmful for the ability of the same nation. As Indian masses have started following the western civilization and have forgotten their own cultural values and beliefs. In conclusion, although technology has made the world a global due to which countries are exchanging their cultures. This trend has both pros and cons on the fashion of a particular nation

Nowadays the whole world has This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 up with a single platform due to the advancement in technology. The You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 are exchanging their cultures and beliefs. This is a highly
 debatable issue that whether this trend is beneficial or harmful for a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
. In my opinion, it has both This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:beneficial
positive
 and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:adverse
negative
 impacts on life on This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
.

Firstly
, it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assists
helps
 in improving the trade between two You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
, which results in better economic condition of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
. For example
, it encourages the investment between two You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtribedemocracypeopleunioncommunitysociety
nations
 and it also
 opens the ways of employment in foreign You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
. Secondly
, it is also
 helpful in enhancing our knowledge about fashion of other You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtribedemocracypeopleunioncommunitysociety
nations
. As, by getting knowledge about civilization and language of other You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtribedemocracypeopleunioncommunitysociety
nations
, we can easily
 settle in that country.

This trend has a disadvantage also
. “As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :in some instances
sometimes
 it can dominate on the civilization of a particular You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtribedemocracypeopleunioncommunitysociety
nation
. For example
, the trade between India and China has dominated in the market of Indian This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :productscommoditiesmerchandises
goods
. As the things made in China are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonedassumedbelievedconsidered
thought
 to be more durable and less costly, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 of India prefer to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buy
 China made things as compared to their personal products. Moreover
, cultural exchange between two You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 may prove harmful for the ability of the same You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtribedemocracypeopleunioncommunitysociety
nation
. As Indian masses have This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 following the western civilization and have forgotten their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 cultural values and beliefs.

In conclusion
, although technology has made the world a global due to which You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 are exchanging their cultures. This trend has both pros and cons on the fashion of a particular Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphnation.nation!nation?nation:nation,nation;
nation