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Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small , local business are unable to compete. some people think that closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities

Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. some people think that closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities 1GRL
Daily life has been changed due to globalization. expansion of supermarkets is also a phase of globalization. Expansion of supermarkets is debatable in concern with local businesses. Some people opine that supermarket will take over the local business that will lead to end of local communities. I believe big markets bring a boost in development of local businesses. To commence with, every business can easily grow if there is a competitor. No doubts, supermarkets are those places where everything is easily accessible and one can buy everything under one roof. On a contrary, supermarkets create a competition among small business than local investor will think about the improvement of business as to succeed in market. Moreover, number of products are manufacture by local people as they have plenty of experience. For instance, in India women are expert in embroidery due to this, demand of handmade art and craft touched to sky in past years in international market. Supermarket plays crucial role in marketing process. Furthermore, local investor have fear regarding quality of product as a few people have illusion that product of supermarket exteriors over local product however, nowadays social media assist local business to create awareness among public. Undoubtedly, development of supermarkets helpful to bring local product into international market. In conclusion, in my opinion its impossible that growth of supermarket will leads to death of local communities. local communities has their own identity. Certainly, local business will grow as development of supermarket.
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changed
due to globalization.
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expansion
of supermarkets is
also
a phase of globalization. Expansion of supermarkets is debatable in concern with
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local
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businesses
.
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people
opine that supermarket will take over the
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local
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business
that will lead to
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end
of
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local
communities. I believe
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big
markets bring a boost in development of
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local
businesses.

To commence with, every
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business
can
easily
grow if there is a competitor. No doubts, supermarkets are those places where everything is
easily
accessible and one can
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buy
everything under one roof. On a contrary, supermarkets create a competition among
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small
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business
than
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local
investor will
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think
about the improvement of
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business
as to succeed in market.
Moreover
, number of
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products
are manufacture by
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local
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people
as they have
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plenty
of experience.
For instance
, in India women are expert in embroidery due to this, demand of handmade art and craft touched to sky in past years in international market. Supermarket plays crucial role in marketing process.

Furthermore
,
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local
investor have fear regarding quality of
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product
as a few
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people
have illusion that
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product
of supermarket exteriors over
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local
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product
however
, nowadays social media assist
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local
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business
to create awareness among public.
Undoubtedly
, development of supermarkets helpful to bring
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local
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product
into international market.

In conclusion
, in my opinion its impossible that growth of supermarket will leads to death of
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local
communities.
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local
communities has their
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own
identity.
Certainly
,
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local
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business
will grow as development of supermarket.
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IELTS essay Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. some people think that closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities

Essay
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244 words
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