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Doing unpaid work, helping poor communities

Doing unpaid work, helping poor communities Ql2D9
It is in fact that an increasing number of young people from rich nations are volunteering in impoverished areas. After analyzing this tendency, a tons of reasons and its benefits for both communities and volunteer themselves are found. These following will explain why the young are tending to travel to low-income countries to do unpaid work. For one reason, these individuals wish to demonstrate their responsibilities to developing nations in a variety of ways, including via teaching and the construction of housing which those countries lack a workforce and yet cannot afford to pay. Many high school graduates, for example, have chosen to travel to Southeast Asian nations to assist other kids in learning English before beginning university. Furthermore, working in a different nation allows them to get vital experience that they would not be able to obtain in their own country. In this way, young people can obtain numerous things in life which is worth much more than money. Take everything into account, it is true that more and more young people in rich countries are volunteering in disadvantaged areas. This movements not only brings about many advantages for volunteers but also for the communities.
It is in fact that an increasing number of
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from rich
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are volunteering in impoverished areas. After analyzing this tendency,
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a tons
of reasons and its benefits for both communities and volunteer themselves
are found
.

These following will
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explain
why the
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young
are tending to travel to low-income
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countries
to do unpaid work. For one reason, these individuals wish to demonstrate their responsibilities to developing
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nations
in a variety of ways, including via teaching and the construction of housing which those
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countries
lack a workforce and
yet
cannot afford to pay.
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Many
high school graduates,
for example
, have chosen to travel to Southeast Asian
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nations
to assist other kids in learning English
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before
beginning university.
Furthermore
, working in a
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different
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nation
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allows
them to
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get
vital experience that they would not be able to obtain in their
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own
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country
. In this way,
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young
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people
can obtain numerous things in life which is worth much more than money.

Take everything into account, it is true that more and more
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young
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people
in rich
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countries
are volunteering in disadvantaged areas.
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brings about
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many
advantages for volunteers
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for the communities.

IELTS essay Doing unpaid work, helping poor communities

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
196 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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