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Do you think that a company’s top priority should be to make a profit?

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The profit plays an important role in the operation of an enterprise so I think the company should prioritize it on top. However, the organization should apparently deeply pay attention to other necessary matters such as building an ideal working environment and taking care of the environment. Those matters play a crucial factor in the succession of enterprise. Firstly, the company profoundly concentrates on making profit because money is the flow of blood that helps the corporation run smoothly and effectively. Particularly, each operation of the organization from the minor to the major aspects also needs a considerable budget to address and boost the proficiency. Brainstorming to generate many methods or find a variety of potential opportunities to make the fertile flow of money. Which is the best way to develop the enterprise with the obligated condition is legal. Secondly, the creating a great and ideal working environment is the essential interest of the head of each organization. Which is deeply relevant to the development of a company. Consequently, the leader should have fair and good assessments, a well-equipped working space, and even create a unique culture. Which is the big motivation to encourage all employees to work with their ethics, all their best and serve the organization for a long time. Finally, one of other vital interests is environmental protection. As far as we know, the speed development of technology and industry causes significant damage to the living environment and even nature. Whereby, having the responsibilities of protecting the environment is the obligation and mission of all enterprises. Keeping clear and fresh surrounding habitat is one of the concerns in running an organization. The company should have the equipment and policies to distract and reduce the air and water pollution. In conclusion, I think the company should pay attention to making profit. Nevertheless, we should have a deep regard to protect the environment and build a great workplace for all employees. I believe those concerns will help the enterprise run smoothly and successfully.
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enterprise
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think
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company
should prioritize it on top.
However
, the
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organization
should
apparently
deeply
pay attention to other necessary matters such as building an ideal working
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environment
and taking care of the
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environment
. Those matters play a crucial factor in the succession of enterprise.

Firstly
, the
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company
profoundly
concentrates on making profit
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because
money is the flow of blood that
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helps
the corporation run
smoothly
and
effectively
.
Particularly
, each operation of the
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organization
from the minor to the major aspects
also
needs a considerable budget to address and boost the proficiency. Brainstorming to generate
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many
methods or find a variety of potential opportunities to
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make
the fertile flow of money.
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Which
is the best way to develop the
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enterprise
with the obligated condition is legal.

Secondly
, the creating a great and ideal working
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environment
is the essential interest of the head of each
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organization
.
“Which” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Which
is
deeply
relevant to the development of a
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company
.
Consequently
, the leader should have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
and
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good
assessments, a well-equipped working space, and even create a unique culture. Which is the
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big
motivation to encourage all employees to work with their ethics, all their best and serve the
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organization
for a long time.

Finally
, one of other vital interests is environmental protection. As far as we know, the speed development of technology and industry causes significant damage to the living
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
and even nature. Whereby, having the responsibilities of protecting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
is the obligation and mission of all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
enterprises
. Keeping
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
and fresh surrounding habitat is one of the concerns in running an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
organization
. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
should have the equipment and policies to distract and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the air and water pollution.

In conclusion
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
the
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company
should pay attention to making profit.
Nevertheless
, we should have a deep regard to protect the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
and build a great workplace for all employees. I believe those concerns will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
enterprise
run
smoothly
and
successfully
.
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IELTS essay Do you think that a company’s top priority should be to make a profit?

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  American English
5 paragraphs
334 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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