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Do you like living in an extended family or a nuclear family? Explain the reasons for your choice

Do you like living in an extended family or a nuclear family? Explain the reasons for your choice O60x7
From my point of view, I prefer living in a nuclear family to living in an extended family. I choose nuclear family instead of extended family because living in nuclear family is comfortable. When you live in extended family, you will live with many people so you will get into trouble frequently. Sometime, you can’t find a common voice, although it’s a relative. In addition, we can share the chores in my house and we can do it together. Moreover, my parents are more open-minded. They always just give us advice, but they never try to impose their decision on us, which I like most in a nuclear family. I love living in a nuclear family.
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is comfortable. When you
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. Sometime, you can’t find a common voice, although it’s a relative.
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, we can share the chores in my
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we can do it together.
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, my parents are more open-minded. They always
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give us advice,
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they never try to impose their decision on us, which I like most in a nuclear
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IELTS essay Do you like living in an extended family or a nuclear family? Explain the reasons for your choice

Essay
  American English
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116 words
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