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Now a days Education is more commercialised. It is positive or negative.

Now a days Education is more commercialised. It is positive or negative. kxkNN
In today’s world education is more commercialised than earlier. There are both positive and negative sides of privatisation of institutions. Many institutions cop-up with high- tech education systems, by using digital learning system they make learning easy for students. They also organise skill development and training programmes, webinars, workshops to enhance skill. They do not compromise with quality of education. Increase in the number of private schools and colleges develop country’s economy as there are more skilled labour in the country. However, due to commercialisation in education sector, many institutions demand huge amount of money which an ordinary people can not afford only richer class of families can prefer it. Underprivileged or poor people are unable to get good education, being uneducated they have to suffer throughout their life even for their daily essentials. In my opinion i can say that privatisation of schools and colleges is good for students but fees level should be controled by government authorities at certain level so a middle man can able to pay out fees. Government can provide subsidies to institutions and also scholarships to students so poorer people can easily get admission in desired streams and institutions.
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education
is more
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commercialised
than earlier. There are both
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positive
and
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negative
sides of
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privatisation
of institutions.
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institutions cop-up with high- tech
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education
systems, by using digital learning system they
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make
learning easy for students. They
also
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organise
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skill
development and training
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programmes
, webinars, workshops to enhance
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skill
. They do not compromise with quality of
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education
. Increase in the number of private schools and colleges develop country’s economy as there are more skilled
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labour
in the country.
However
, due to
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commercialisation
in
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education
sector,
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many
institutions demand huge amount of money which an ordinary
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people
can not afford
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only
richer
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class
of families can prefer it. Underprivileged or poor
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people
are unable to
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get
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good
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education
,
being uneducated
they
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have to
suffer throughout their life even for their daily essentials. In my opinion
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i
can say that
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privatisation
of schools and colleges is
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good
for students
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but
fees level should be
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controled
by
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government
authorities at certain level
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so
a middle
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man
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can able to
pay out fees.
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Government
can provide subsidies to institutions and
also
scholarships to students
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so
poorer
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people
can
easily
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get
admission in desired streams and institutions.
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IELTS essay Now a days Education is more commercialised. It is positive or negative.

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  American English
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