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Do you agree or disagree with the statement that female and male university students should have separate residence halls? v.1

that female and male university students should have separate residence halls? v. 1
In today’s busy life, staying in touch with family and friends has become very difficult. Therefore, the existence of social networking sites (such as Facebook) proves to be a bliss in today’s time. However, not everyone likes this idea and it is considered that such networking sites have had a significant negative influence on both people and society. In my opinion, social networking sites are important and useful, provided these are used wisely and responsibly. Two main factors are behind putting social networking sites into bad light. First is, it allows people to look into other individual’s personal life, like photos and videos. In other words, if someone has not set up appropriate restrictions on his or her account, it gives easy access to their account and therefore, anyone can look into the person’s online data. This may lead to several criminal or fraudulent activities such us, robbery, kidnapping, etc. The second factor, linked to the first, is the social pressure under which a person is forced to put his personal information (photos, whereabouts, etc. ), on the social media sites. This means, in order to maintain his social symbol, an individual would try to show off how happy and content his life is by posting pictures, for example, photos of his foreign location, new gifts or presents’, etc. Such desires may sometimes lead to frictions in relationships when an individual starts caring too much for the social status rather than actually focussing on true relations. The whole idea and concept of social networking sites is to connect people around the world, so that distance would not matter anymore. However, as our world is a mix of good and bad intent people, it is important to be careful and watchful. In conclusion, although social networking sites give us a chance to stay closer and connected to our family and friends, they can lead to a huge negative impact on both individuals and society if not used with proper settings or restrictions on the account.
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today
’s busy life, staying in touch with family and friends has become
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very
difficult.
Therefore
, the existence of
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social
networking
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sites
(such as Facebook) proves to be a bliss in
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today
’s time.
However
, not everyone likes this
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idea
and it
is considered
that such networking
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sites
have had a significant
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negative
influence on both
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people
and society.

In my opinion,
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social
networking
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sites
are
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important
and useful, provided these are
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used
wisely
and
responsibly
.

Two main factors are behind putting
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social
networking
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sites
into
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bad
light.
First
is, it
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allows
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people
to look into other
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individual’s
personal life, like photos and videos.
In other words
, if someone has not set up appropriate restrictions on
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his or her
account, it gives easy access to their account and
therefore
, anyone can look into the person’s online data. This may lead to several criminal or fraudulent activities such us, robbery, kidnapping, etc. The second factor, linked to the
first
, is the
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social
pressure under which a person
is forced
to put his personal information (photos, whereabouts, etc.
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, on the
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social
media
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sites
. This means, in order to maintain his
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social
symbol, an
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individual
would try to
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show
off how happy and content his life is by posting pictures,
for example
, photos of his foreign location, new gifts or presents’, etc. Such desires may
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sometimes
lead to frictions in relationships when an
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individual
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starts
caring too much for the
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social
status
rather
than actually focussing on true relations.

The whole
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idea
and concept of
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social
networking
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sites
is to connect
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people
around the world,
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so
that distance would not matter anymore.
However
, as our world is a mix of
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good
and
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bad
intent
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people
, it is
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important
to be careful and watchful.

In conclusion
, although
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social
networking
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sites
give us a chance to stay closer and connected to our family and friends, they can lead to a huge
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negative
impact on both
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individuals
and society if not
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used
with proper settings or restrictions on the account.
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IELTS essay that female and male university students should have separate residence halls? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
334 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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