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Do you agree or disagree with the following statements? Boys and girls should attend seperate schools. Use speciefic examples and reasons v.15

Boys and girls should attend seperate schools. Use speciefic examples and reasons v. 15
School is part of every student. It meant to foster and to promote a student' s sence of self. It instills the importance of education in our youg minds. And intoduces us to the joy of learning. Some people agree that, boys and girls should attend seperate school, others disagree. In my opinion, i disagree that, boys and girlls should attend seperate school, for tow important reasons. The main reason is that, job require both sex to work together. Many jobs have boys and girls working together. Each person has different responsibilty and different carrer. So, the school is a good voyage to prepare the students to the job. For example, 20 years ago, i was in the dale high school. We were boys and girls in the same school, we educatedand and learned together. This helped me to expose to the variety of opinions, and how the boys is thinking. As a result, when i attend my job and both sexes were working together, we did a really great job by taking different ideas. In addition, it wasn' t difficult to me to work with boys because my school already prepared me to that issue. The second reason is that, to get along well with opposite sex. Here, we can deal with each other normally, and perfectly at the same time. The school years allow us to be together and then we can deal with each other in a success way. For example, back to the years, when i was in elementary school, my math professor asked us to choose a partner. I chose my friend tim. He was really amazing friend that i can deal with him better than anybody else. And the same thing for him. And this again prepare us to deal well with each other in different faces of the life. And I never had frustrated to deal with boys in the university or in the job. All in all, according to the arguments mentioned above, personally, i disagreed that, boys and girls should seperate, because if they educate together, this will prepare them to the job, and they can get along well with each other. I recommended all students to be in the same school with different sex and see how many advantages that they can get.
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people
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should attend
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seperate
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school
, others disagree. In my opinion,
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i
disagree that,
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should attend
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seperate
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, for tow
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job
require both
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to work together.
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working together. Each person has
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students
to the
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job
.
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, 20 years ago,
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i
was in the dale high
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school
. We were
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boys
and
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girls
in the same
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school
, we
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educatedand
and learned together. This
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helped
me to expose to the variety of opinions, and how the
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boys
is thinking.
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, when
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i
attend my
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job
and both
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sexes
were working together, we did a
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ideas
.
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boys
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already prepared me to that issue.

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. Here, we can
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normally
, and
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years
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us to be
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together and
then we can
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deal
with each
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in a success way.
For example
, back to the years, when
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i
was in elementary
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school
, my math professor asked us to choose a partner. I chose my friend
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tim
. He was
really
amazing friend that
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i
can
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deal
with him better than anybody else. And the same thing for him. And this again prepare us to
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deal
well with each
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other
in
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different
faces of the life.
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And
I never had frustrated to
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with
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boys
in the university or in the job.

All in all, according to the arguments mentioned above,
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,
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i
disagreed that,
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and
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girls
should
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seperate
,
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because
if they educate together, this will prepare them to the
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job
, and they can
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get
along well with each
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other
. I recommended all
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students
to be in the same
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school
with
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different
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sex
and
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see
how
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advantages that they can
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.
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50Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Boys and girls should attend seperate schools. Use speciefic examples and reasons v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
383 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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