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Do you agree or disagree? It is easier to bring up a child now than it was 50 years earlier. Give reasons. v.79

It is easier to bring up a child now than it was 50 years earlier. Give reasons. v. 79
Nowadays, university education is essential for getting a well paying job. For this reason, many people believe that government should make university education free for every student; irrespective of their educational background. I personally tend to agree with this statement, and in this essay I will support my views with examples. Firstly, every year government spends huge amount of taxpayer money to maintain and develop universities across India. For example, it has been estimated that, the education department of India spends close to Rs. 50 million every year on infrastructure and maintenance for IIT's across India. As a result of this spending, IIT's have become one of the premium engineering institutes in the world with world class labs and faculty. Apart from this, every year due to inflation and other market situations cost of maintenance is going up drastically On the other hand, the cost of university education has gone up drastically over the past few years. For instance, the average fee for a three year graduate course in an Indian university was approximately Rs. 20, 000 in the early 2000's, but this has incrementally increased over the years, and currently, the two year graduate course cost around Rs. 50, 000. As a result, more and more students; especially from the financially backward families are dropping the idea of university education and looking at other options. Having looked at both sides of the argument, in my view, instead of completely waiving of the fee, the government should look at subsidising the university fee for student coming from economically backward families
Nowadays,
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university
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education
is essential for getting a well paying job.
For this reason
,
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many
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people
believe that
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government
should
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make
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university
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education
free for every student; irrespective of their educational background. I
personally
tend to
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agree
with this statement, and in this essay I will support my views with examples.

Firstly
, every
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year
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government
spends huge amount of taxpayer money to maintain and develop
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universities
across India.
For example
, it has
been estimated
that, the
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education
department of India spends close to Rs. 50 million every
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year
on infrastructure and maintenance for IIT's across India.
As a result
of this spending, IIT's have become one of the premium engineering institutes in the world with world
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class
labs and faculty. Apart from this, every
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year
due to inflation and other market situations cost of maintenance is going up
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drastically


On the other hand
, the cost of
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university
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education
has gone up
drastically
over the past few years.
For instance
, the average fee for a three
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year
graduate course in an Indian
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university
was approximately Rs. 20, 000 in the early
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2000's
,
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but
this has
incrementally
increased over the years, and
currently
, the two
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year
graduate course cost around Rs. 50, 000.
As a result
, more and more students;
especially
from the
financially
backward families are dropping the
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idea
of
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university
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education
and looking at other options.

Having looked at both sides of the argument, in my view,
instead
of completely waiving of the fee, the
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government
should look at
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subsidising
the
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university
fee for student coming from
economically
backward families
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It is easier to bring up a child now than it was 50 years earlier. Give reasons. v. 79

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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