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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. 2bKPk
These days people are willing to go to abroad for the happiness and few people think that these type of travelling has a cynical impact on the countries travelled to. Firstly, I strongly disagree because travelling leaves a positive vibration to the people. Every time when people move from one country to another, they always experience a good atmosphere and they get to know the different kinds of cultures. For example, people can view the popular sceneries, experience variety of food, meet many strangers, explore the beaches, participate in several water sports and even explore the different kinds of flora and fauna. Hence, travelling from another country will always be refreshment for mind and body. Secondly, what is the negative effect for the visited countries from the people who visit? In my opinion, the foreign countries always has their benefits. For instance, country can gain more income, get more popularity in other countries, there will be a positive flow of the people in the major cities, working culture will be increased, and students can also have a different lifestyle. Thus, as stated, I believe that movement of the people to other countries will always be profitable to the countries visited. To conclude, persons travelling from their native to another country or culture, will always be a optimistic impact on the visited countries.
These days
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people
are willing to
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go to abroad
for the happiness and few
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people
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think
that these type of
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travelling
has a cynical impact on the
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countries
travelled to.

Firstly
, I
strongly
disagree
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because
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travelling
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leaves
a
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positive
vibration to the
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people
. Every time when
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people
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move
from one
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country
to another, they always experience a
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good
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atmosphere and
they
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get
to know the
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different
kinds of cultures.
For example
,
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people
can view the popular sceneries, experience variety of food,
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meet
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many
strangers, explore the beaches, participate in several water sports and even explore the
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different
kinds of flora and fauna.
Hence
,
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travelling
from another
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country
will always be refreshment for mind and body.

Secondly
, what is the
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negative
effect for the visited
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countries
from the
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people
who visit?

In my opinion, the foreign
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countries
always has their benefits.
For instance
,
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country
can gain more income,
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get
more popularity in other
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countries
, there will be a
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positive
flow of the
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people
in the major cities, working culture will
be increased
, and students can
also
have a
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different
lifestyle.
Thus
, as stated, I believe that movement of the
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people
to other
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countries
will always be profitable to the
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countries
visited.

To conclude
, persons
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travelling
from their native to another
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country
or culture, will always be
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a
optimistic impact on the visited
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countries
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to.

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