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Disruptive School Students Have A Negative Influence On Others

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Irrefutably, disruptions in classroom have an indelible effect on students’ academic performance. Many people argue that students who are disobedient and mischievous must be taught in separate classrooms away from obedient students. I vehemently disagree with this notion as separating students on the basis of their behaviour will just aggravate this problem. There are multifarious reasons to strengthen my viewpoint. First, when students are streamed according to their behaviour, they are often stigmatised and even feel inferior to well-behaving students. Worse still, other students may refuse to interact with the ill-mannered students. Since intelligent students perform well in academics, they set a preconceived notion that socialising with less disciplined students will lower their grades. More worryingly, this will create animosity among two different sections and eventually ruin the atmosphere of the school. Concomitantly, instead of separating sections of naughty and obedient student to limit distractions, disciplined students must set an example in front of their classmates and thus motivate them to show sincerity in classrooms. More importantly, children studying together can learn the art of collaboration and sharing. To illustrate, students with higher abilities can exchange their views with those who show less interest in studying. Consequently, this cooperation encourages students to study more and this will naturally help to maintain discipline in the classroom and limit disruption. To conclude, I firmly reiterate that rather than separating sections of students on the basis of their level of discipline, teachers should encourage morally correct students to set an example in front of their classmates.
Irrefutably
, disruptions in classroom have an indelible effect on
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students’
academic performance.
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Many
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people
argue that
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students
who are disobedient and mischievous
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must
be taught
in separate classrooms away from obedient
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students
. I
vehemently
disagree with this notion as separating
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students
on the basis of their
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behaviour
will
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just
aggravate this problem.

There are multifarious reasons to strengthen my viewpoint.
First
, when
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students
are streamed
according to their
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behaviour
, they are
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often
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stigmatised
and even feel inferior to well-behaving
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students
. Worse
still
, other
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students
may refuse to interact with the ill-mannered
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students
. Since intelligent
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students
perform well in academics, they set a preconceived notion that
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socialising
with less disciplined
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students
will lower their grades. More
worryingly
, this will create animosity among two
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different
sections and
eventually
ruin the atmosphere of the school.

Concomitantly
,
instead
of separating sections of naughty and obedient
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student
to limit distractions, disciplined
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students
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must
set an example in front of their classmates and
thus
motivate them to
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show
sincerity in classrooms. More
importantly
, children studying together can learn the art of collaboration and sharing. To illustrate,
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students
with higher abilities can exchange their views with those who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
less interest in studying.
Consequently
, this cooperation encourages
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students
to study more and this will
naturally
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help
to maintain discipline in the classroom and limit disruption.

To conclude
, I
firmly
reiterate that
rather
than separating sections of
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students
on the basis of their level of discipline, teachers should encourage
morally
correct
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to set an example in front of their classmates.
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IELTS essay Disruptive School Students Have A Negative Influence On Others

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  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
5.5
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