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Discuss the advantage and disadvantage living and working in foreign countries.

Nowadays more and more people living in foreign countries. Citizen are moving to developing countries because better life and good job. I think that, there are more pros competing to cons. My justification is classified in upcoming paragraphs. To begin with, there are few significant benefits to moving in foreign Nations. First major advantage is good education and better weather. To justify, human beings learn be their they can a wonderful job opportunity. Also they can learn good management. It will be increase in skills. They will become a stubborn. Taking America, for example, they also provide a valuable education because they schools and colleges are hundreds years old. They can also learn about how to develop skill and also provide a scholarship. In addition, most benefit is good atmosphere. Foreign countries have a pure weather than it rarely makes us sick and gives the brain a fresh fill. For instance, Newzealand is very big country. They have also claim that there is a very clean atmosphere and about 1% of the air is polluted. Apart from this foreign Nations have a serval types of job. Individuals can a part time or full time work and also save a money for the future and need to get family. However, not looking another side, there are few drawbaks for living and working in foreign countries. First big disadvantage is citizen live in alone and those mankind are away from their family. They have not eating a good food. Some time they did not need for own. Second big cons it is to difficult adopte to their culture and rules. To conclude, advantages are more stronger to the disadvantages. Better weather and job opportunity to live in foreign. While, the huge lose of far from the family.
Nowadays more and more
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people
living in
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foreign
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countries
. Citizen are moving to developing
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countries
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because
better life and
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good
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job
. I
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think
that, there are more pros competing to cons. My justification
is classified
in upcoming paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, there are few significant benefits to moving in
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foreign
Nations.
First
major advantage is
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good
education and better weather. To justify, human beings learn
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be
their they can a wonderful
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job
opportunity.
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Also
they can learn
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good
management. It will be increase in
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skills
. They will become
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a stubborn
. Taking America,
for example
, they
also
provide a valuable education
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because
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they schools
and colleges are hundreds years
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old
. They can
also
learn about how to develop
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skill
and
also
provide a scholarship.

In addition
, most benefit is
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good
atmosphere.
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Foreign
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countries
have a pure weather than it rarely
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makes
us sick and gives the brain a fresh fill.
For instance
,
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Newzealand
is
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very
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big
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country
. They have
also
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claim
that there is a
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very
clean atmosphere and about 1% of the air
is polluted
. Apart from this
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foreign
Nations have a
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serval
types of
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job
. Individuals can a
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part time
or full time work and
also
save
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a money
for the future and need to
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get
family.

However
, not looking another side, there are few
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drawbaks
for living and working in
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foreign
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countries
.
First
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big
disadvantage is citizen
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live
in alone and
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those mankind
are away from their family. They have not
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eating
a
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good
food.
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Some
time they did not need for
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own
. Second
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big
cons it is to difficult
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adopte
to their culture and
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rules
.

To conclude
, advantages are
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more stronger
to the disadvantages. Better weather and
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job
opportunity to
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live
in
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foreign
.
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While
, the huge lose of far from the family.
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IELTS essay Discuss the advantage and disadvantage living and working in foreign countries.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
295 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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