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Differences between the ways people communicated in the past and they communicate now

Differences between the ways people communicated in the past and they communicate now YynR5
Nowadays, Everyone takes advantage of modern technology. Almost everyone has a cellulate phone and we can easily communicate with other people. We can even get in touch with people who are miles away. Also we can keep in touch with other people with video call that it was not possible 20 years ago. Technology is evolving rapidly. If we look at the past people used fire for communication but this way was difficult we just could passed 2-3 message from away. When people invented writing then they used letter for communication. Even the letter was sent far away by some birds. After some advances in technology, the telegraph was invented. The telegraph gave a great impetus to the development of today's technology. Signals of telegraph was passed with wire. Approximately in the late 1800s telephone was discovered. Also signals of phone was passed with wire. Then the telephone was developed and adapted to today's technology. We still don't know what the communication will be like in the future. we can visually appear next to the person we want at any time in the future.
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. Almost everyone has a
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people
. We can even
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get
in touch with
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people
who are miles away.
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Also
we can
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keep
in touch with other
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people
with video call that it was not possible 20 years ago.
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Technology
is evolving
rapidly
. If we look at the past
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people
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used
fire for communication
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2-3 message from away. When
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people
invented writing then they
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used
letter for communication. Even the letter was
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sent
far away by
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some
birds. After
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some
advances in
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technology
, the telegraph
was invented
. The telegraph gave a great impetus to the development of
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today
's
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technology
. Signals of telegraph
was passed
with wire. Approximately in the late 1800s telephone
was discovered
.
Also
signals of phone
was passed
with wire. Then the telephone
was developed
and adapted to
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today
's
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technology
. We
still
don't know what the communication will be like in the future.
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we
can
visually
appear
next
to the person we want at any time in the future.
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IELTS essay Differences between the ways people communicated in the past and they communicate now

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
184 words
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