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Developed countries invest a huge amount of money on health care, others oppose that they should spend money on other areas to improve health. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Developed countries invest a huge amount of money on health care, others oppose that they should spend money on other areas to improve health. wk3E
Majority of developed nations invest a huge amount of funds on the health sector, while few opine that they should provide edification about health to keep people healthy. This essay will discuss why providing health facilities is beneficial and how awakingpeople can be more fruitful to improve their health. Investing on health sector is worthwhile as it cure and treat various ailments of humans. As in previous times medicines and machines used for operating people were not as advanced as today, this just happened because of expenditure on medical inventions. For example, various technologies are found after research to cure serious diseases like different kind of cancers by spending money on medical services. Education about health is mandatory to stay away from diseases. If countries spend some money on teaching people about the benefits of healthy dietary and exercises, then they can prevent themselves from certain diseases. For instance, developed nations recently introduced some programs to help people to decrease obesity by providing them valuable information about the hazardous impacts of fast foods, and it decreased this problem by 10% within few months. Expenditure on medical services is mandatory to cure or treat people who are currently suffering from ailments. Apart from it, spending some money to educate people about health will be as fruitful as it. In conclusion, although spending on health care is crucial to save lives of people who are suffering, awareness about health before being in diseases can be more considerable by investing some pennies.
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sector, while few opine that they should provide edification about
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health
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people
healthy. This essay will discuss why providing
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facilities is beneficial and how
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awakingpeople
can be more fruitful to
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improve
their health.

Investing on
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health
sector is worthwhile as it
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cure
and treat various ailments of humans. As in previous times medicines and machines
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used
for operating
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people
were not as advanced as
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today
, this
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just
happened
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because
of expenditure on medical inventions.
For example
, various technologies
are found
after research to cure serious
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diseases
like
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different
kind of cancers by spending money on medical services.

Education about
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health
is mandatory to stay away from
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diseases
. If countries spend
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some
money on teaching
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people
about the benefits of healthy dietary and exercises, then they can
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prevent
themselves from certain
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diseases
.
For instance
, developed nations recently introduced
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some
programs to
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help
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people
to decrease obesity by providing them valuable information about the hazardous impacts of
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fast
foods, and it decreased this problem by 10% within few months.

Expenditure on medical services is mandatory to cure or treat
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people
who are
currently
suffering from ailments. Apart from it, spending
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some
money to educate
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people
about
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health
will be as fruitful as it.

In conclusion
, although spending on
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health
care is crucial to save
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lives
of
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people
who are suffering, awareness about
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health
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before
being in
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diseases
can be more considerable by investing
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some
pennies.
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IELTS essay Developed countries invest a huge amount of money on health care, others oppose that they should spend money on other areas to improve health.

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5 paragraphs
249 words
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