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Describing a shop that you like

Describing a shop that you like J0eK0
Shopping- something that has an insane amount of types- is much liked by most people. But is also hated by some. Personally, shopping is one of my least favourite things to do. But, to make my shopping a little more bearable, I have a shop that I am particularly biased about. "The corner Store" is one of my favourite places to do shopping at. Not only does it sell almost every essential you can think of- including clothes- but it is almost never packed with customers, which is a plus point for someone as introverted as I am. The corner Store is located a few streets away from where I live and is open from early morning to midnight. It is a big store with an even bigger parking area so that I never have to spend precious time on looking for parking spaces. The store has 4floors that stretch for about 50 meters and each floor has its own dedicated type of products sold on it. Each floor sells groceries, stationary, clothes and kitchenware respectively. The store also has a friendly atmosphere as there are not many customers; the air is fresher than other stores, there is no loud noise, you do not get pushed around and the queues for checkout are short. Fortunately, even the people that shop there have calm personalities with no liking for needless drama or argument with the cashier. Everyone respects personal space and no one pushes or fights someone else for a product.
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people
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favourite
things to do.
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more bearable, I have a shop that I am
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The corner Store
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is one of my
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favourite
places to do
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at. Not
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does it sell almost every essential you can
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of- including clothes-
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it is almost never packed with customers, which is a plus point for someone as introverted as I am.

The corner
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Store
is located
a few streets away from where I
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live
and is open from early morning to midnight. It is a
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big
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store
with an even bigger parking area
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so
that I never
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have to
spend precious time on looking for parking spaces. The
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store
has 4floors that stretch for about 50 meters and each floor has its
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own
dedicated type of products sold on it. Each floor sells groceries, stationary, clothes and kitchenware
respectively
. The
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store
also
has a friendly atmosphere as there are not
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many
customers; the air is fresher than other
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stores
, there is no loud noise, you do not
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get
pushed around and the queues for checkout are short.
Fortunately
, even the
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people
that shop there have calm personalities with no liking for needless drama or argument with the cashier. Everyone respects personal space and no one pushes or fights someone else for a product.
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IELTS essay Describing a shop that you like

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
250 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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