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Although it may seem that people are working more,

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Although it may seem that people are working more, studies show that we have more leisure time than ever before. Yet researchers are reporting higher levels of both stress and obesity. These reports appear to be a sign that we are not using our leisure time to our best advantage. Health experts agree that the best way to restore body and mind is to spend time in nature pursuing a comfortable level of physical exercise. Spending time in natural surroundings is especially crucial now because, for the first time, a majority of the world's population live in cities. Recent studies show that intellectual function weakens as a result of the energy expended simply sorting out the overWhelming stimuli of city life. Tests demonstrate that people suffer decreases in attention span, memory, and problem-solving ability after taking a short walk on a busy city street or merely seeing pictures of city life. Tests also show that time spent in the city results in a decreased ability to concentrate and to control emotions and impulses. On the other hand, spending time in the country produces the opposite effects. Unfortunately, as society becomes more centered on city life, we have to rejuvenate ourselves in nature deliberately rather than as a matter of course. Yet research shows that we are not spending our leisure time rejuvenating ourselves. Around the world, the most popular way to spend free time is watching television. This, the most passive of pastimes, is how Americans spend more than half their leisure time. Globally, the next most popular is using the Internet, also passive, and it ranks as the most favored among the billions in China. The third is shopping, which may be slightly more active but is still as far from nature as possible. Modern shopping malls remove shoppers from everything natural, leaving them to experience the outdoors only between the paved parking lot and the mall doors. Children are most negatively affected by city life. Parents are reluctant to let children play freely in the city, fearing for their health and safety, and nature is something many children in the city may never have a chance to experience. Childhood obesity and depression are reaching epidemic levels. Authorities have begun to acknowledge the problem, and innovative programs that give children an opportunity to spend time in nature are being introduced in countries around the world. Vacations are the most obvious chunk of leisure time. The countries with the most vacation time are Italy, with an average of forty-two days a year, and France, with thirty-seven. The industrious Americans have the least: thirteen days. Yet the country most satisfied with their vacations are not the Italians but the British. The British usually divide up their vacation time, taking it in pieces throughout the year rather than all at once. Of all nationalities, the British spend the most time vacationing outdoors in their national-trust parks, where they engage in a comfortable level of physical activity. The British report the greatest satisfaction with their leisure time. Perhaps the rest of the world would do well to follow their lead.
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that we have more
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than ever
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.
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researchers are reporting higher
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levels
of both
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stress
and obesity. These reports appear to be a
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sign
that we are not using our
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leisure
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time
to our best advantage.

Health experts
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that the best way to restore body and mind is to
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spend
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in
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nature
pursuing a comfortable
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level
of physical exercise. Spending
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time
in natural surroundings is
especially
crucial
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, a majority of the world's population
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live
in
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cities
. Recent studies
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that intellectual function weakens
as a result
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simply
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overWhelming
stimuli of city
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.
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demonstrate that
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people
suffer decreases in attention span, memory, and problem-solving ability after taking a short walk on a busy city street or
merely
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life
.
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also
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that
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spent in the city results in a decreased ability to concentrate and to control emotions and impulses.
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, spending
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time
in the
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country
produces the opposite effects.

Unfortunately, as society becomes more centered on city
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life
, we
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have to
rejuvenate ourselves in
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nature
deliberately
rather
than as a matter
of course
.
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research
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shows
that we are not spending our
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leisure
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time
rejuvenating ourselves. Around the world, the most popular way to
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spend
free
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time
is watching television. This, the most passive of pastimes, is how Americans
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spend
more than half their
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leisure
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time
. Globally, the
next
most popular is using the Internet,
also
passive, and it ranks as the most favored among the billions in China. The third is shopping, which may be
slightly
more active
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as far from
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nature
as possible. Modern shopping malls remove shoppers from everything natural, leaving them to experience the outdoors
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only
between the paved parking lot and the mall doors.

Children are most
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affected
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life
. Parents are reluctant to
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children play
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is something
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many
children in the city may never have a chance to experience. Childhood obesity and depression are reaching epidemic
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levels
. Authorities have begun to acknowledge the problem, and innovative programs that give children an opportunity to
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spend
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time
in
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are
being introduced
in
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countries
around the world.

Vacations are the most obvious chunk of
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leisure
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time
. The
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countries
with the most vacation
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time
are Italy, with an average of forty-two days a year, and France, with thirty-seven. The industrious Americans have the least: thirteen days.
Yet
the
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country
most satisfied with their vacations are not the Italians
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but
the British. The British
usually
divide up their vacation
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time
, taking it in pieces throughout the year
rather
than all at once. Of all nationalities, the British
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spend
the most
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time
vacationing outdoors in their national-trust parks, where they engage in a comfortable
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level
of physical activity. The British report the greatest satisfaction with their
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leisure
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time
. Perhaps the rest of the world would do well to follow their lead.
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IELTS essay Although it may seem that people are working more,

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
517 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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