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DESCRIBE YOUR HOMETOWN OR YOUR VILLAGE. YOU SHOULD WRITE IN 150 WORDS

DESCRIBE YOUR HOMETOWN OR YOUR VILLAGE. YOU SHOULD WRITE IN 150 WORDS 6ayV3
Do you know what it is one of the most largest cities, in the north and the capital of Vietnam? Right! The answer is Hanoi and this is my hometown too. Hanoi has many modern buildings, shoppong centres and amusement parks. On the other hand, it is a good place with many educational, entertaiment and job opportunities. But I think the things make Hanoi becomes special are famous tourist attractions like: Hoan Kiem lake, Ho Chi Minh Mausoleum, Hanoi Old Quarter, . . . and delicious foods. In Hanoi, besides personal vehicles, people can travel around by public transports like: buses, taxis, …Because of the dense population, traffic jams is appearing frequently. Luckily, I don’t usually go out during rush hour. Hanoi, the city that I was born and raised in has a lot of my memories. I love the friendly, helpful, sincerity of Hanoians. However, there is still a part of people who are making me worried. They steal, plunder and do more things that are harmful to society. And now, social evils appear
Do you know what it is one of the
Use only "largest" (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
most largest
cities, in the north and the capital of Vietnam? Right! The answer is Hanoi and this is my hometown too.

Hanoi has
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many
modern buildings,
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shoppong
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centres
and amusement parks.
On the other hand
, it is a
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good
place with
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many
educational,
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entertaiment
and job opportunities.
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But
I
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think
the things
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make
Hanoi becomes special are
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famous
tourist attractions like:
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Hoan
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Kiem
lake, Ho Chi Minh Mausoleum, Hanoi
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Old
Quarter
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, .
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.
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and
delicious foods.

In Hanoi,
besides
personal vehicles,
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people
can travel around by public transports like: buses, taxis, …
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Because
of the dense population, traffic jams
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is appearing
frequently
. Luckily, I don’t
usually
go out during rush hour.

Hanoi, the city that I
was born
and raised in has
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a lot of
my memories. I
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love
the friendly, helpful, sincerity of
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Hanoians
.
However
, there is
still
a part of
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people
who are making me worried. They steal, plunder and do more things that are harmful to society. And
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now
, social evils
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appear
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IELTS essay DESCRIBE YOUR HOMETOWN OR YOUR VILLAGE. YOU SHOULD WRITE IN 150 WORDS

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  American English
4 paragraphs
174 words
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