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Describe your favorite present you have received.

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The most favorite present I have received is a ball that my father gave for me at my tenth birthday. It is normal football ball but for me it is important because it is the first gift I am given by my father. My ball is the smalllest of the sizes. That ball is blue, its shell is made of leather, including thirty-two hexagons. I usually play it with my friend in the afternoon after stressful school hours. Now it isn't new so I put it carefully in my bedroom. Whenever I see it, I always remember my dad.
The most favorite present I have received is a ball that my father gave for me at my tenth birthday. It is normal football ball
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IELTS essay Describe your favorite present you have received.

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