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Describe you visit on vacation

Describe you visit on vacation gWeEd
I like to go on a vacation at different place with my family care I would like to talk about a place where I was a went last month on holiday the name of this place is finale it is a pixelscue hill station located in HP State in Northern India I went there last month with my family since it is a quote for approximately 400 km from my hometown at a Friday morning it was a very long drive about 100 about it and we reach their evening Manali has a lot of offer to eat the tourist apologies for the elderly and religious people there are very many Ancient Temple for a young adventure seekers having a like a scorching snow Valley grafting river crossing tracking and paragliding at their disposal on the first day of our holiday weetracker throw attempts to see the forest to reach the han number Temple it is oldest temple of Manali and has a lot of religious significance in the local community the next day we went along value fortunately we found a plant your face know the value without wasting our time we made a small
I like to go on a vacation at
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different
place with my family care I would like to talk about a place where I was a went last month on holiday the name of this place is finale it is a
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pixelscue
hill station located in HP State in Northern India I went there last month with my family since it is a quote for approximately 400 km from my hometown at a Friday morning it was a
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very
long drive about 100 about
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
it and
we reach their evening
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Manali
has
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a lot of offer
to eat the tourist apologies for the elderly and religious
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people
there are
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very
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many
Ancient Temple for a young adventure seekers having a like a scorching snow Valley grafting river crossing tracking and paragliding at their disposal on the
first
day of our holiday
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weetracker
throw attempts to
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see
the forest to reach the
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han
number Temple it is
A determiner is probably missing here: "the oldest".
oldest
temple of
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Manali
and has
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a lot of
religious significance in the local community the
next
day we went along value
fortunately
we found a plant your face know the value without wasting our time we made a
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small
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IELTS essay Describe you visit on vacation

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
195 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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