Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Describe the holiday you recently had, where you went, who you went with what you did and why you enjoyed it.

Describe the holiday you recently had, where you went, who you went with what you did and why you enjoyed it. kYdo2
I would like to talk about the holiday I took to Berlin in Germany a couple of months ago. I chose to go there because I have a lot of friends and of cause business partners living there. I went with my child of then about two years old. I would have loved to go alone, but I had no choice because he was younger and not independent yet, so no one could take care of him just like I would do. We visited a lot of places with my friends, especially the local restaurants, game shows, local shops, and so many other places. I also had meetings with my business partners, we talked about how to better improve and grow my business. I really enjoyed the holiday because I was able to meet new people who were interested in what I do as an entrepreneur. Also, I was able to learn more about European culture, especially German culture. I would defiantly love to go there again because I love so many things about it, especially the people, mode of transportation and so much more. Tho, that's not my first time traveling to Europe but i love berlin most.
I would like to talk about the holiday I took to Berlin in Germany a couple of months ago. I chose to go there
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
friends and
Did you mean "of course" (=naturally)?
of cause
business partners living there.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
went with
my child of then about two years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
loved
to go alone,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I had no choice
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
he was younger and not independent
yet
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
no one could take care of him
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
like I would do. We visited
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
places with my friends,
especially
the local restaurants, game
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
, local shops, and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
other places. I
also
had meetings with my business partners, we talked about how to better
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
and grow my business.

I
really
enjoyed the holiday
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I was able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who
were interested
in what I do as an entrepreneur.
Also
, I was able to learn more about European culture,
especially
German culture. I would
defiantly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to go there again
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
things about it,
especially
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, mode of transportation and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
much more. Tho, that's not my
first
time traveling to Europe
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
Possible spelling mistake found.
berlin
most.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Describe the holiday you recently had, where you went, who you went with what you did and why you enjoyed it.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
199 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts