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Describe one of your family member you spend the most time with - Who is he/she? - What do you usually do together? - What kind of person he/she is? - Why you spend most of the time with him/her?

Describe one of your family member you spend the most time with - Who is he/she? - What do you usually do together? - What kind of person he/she is? - Why you spend most of the time with him/her? 85GXP
Well, I am fortunate enough to have such a sweet family who always stays with me through my thick and thin. I like all my family members, but here, I would like to talk about one of my family members with whom I love to spend most of the time and he is my grandfather. Actually, in this contemporary world most of the people want to live separately from their elders. However, I am fortunate that my grandparents are living with me and we all are under one roof. Well, my grandfather is really close to me and we both spend most of our time together. On weekdays in the evening, we play mind games such as chess, Ludo, sliding puzzle, etc. In order to do brain exercise, whereas on weekends, we play different outdoor games and go to the park which is Stone's throw away from my home. Well, he believes that being mentally strong is as vital as being fit as a fiddle. Apart from that, he loves to try different things whenever one of us crave for any particular dish, we immediately search it's recipe from the Google and try to do experiments in the kitchen. Although, most of time we don't cook the dish as delicious as we plan, my grandfather motivates me to keep trying new things even if we fail at it. This is a reason I love to spend time with him. He always ready to do creative and crazy things I unlike my family. Well, the rest of my family members can always be seen busy in their routine work and they think doing those things which would not benefit us in the future and it is entirely a waste of time. On the other hand, my grandfather has a different perspective, he believes that we should try all those things which we find amusing. I am also like him and that separate us from others. My loving grandfather never turns down my ideas of doing crazy things. That's why, I never miss the boat to spend my time with him.
Well, I am fortunate
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enough
to have such a sweet
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family
who always stays with me through my thick and thin.

I like all my
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family
members,
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but
here, I would like to talk about one of my
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family
members with whom I
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love
to
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spend
most of the
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time and
he is my grandfather.

Actually, in this contemporary world most of the
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people
want to
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live
separately
from their elders.

However
, I am fortunate that my grandparents are living with
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me and
we all are under one roof.

Well, my
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grandfather
is
really
close to
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me and
we both
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spend
most of our
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time
together.

On weekdays in the evening, we play mind games such as chess, Ludo, sliding puzzle, etc. In order to do brain exercise, whereas on weekends, we play
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different
outdoor games and go to the park which is Stone's throw away from my home.

Well, he believes that being mentally strong is as vital as
being fit
as a fiddle.

Apart from that, he
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loves
to try
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different
things whenever one of us crave for any particular dish, we immediately search
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it's
recipe from the Google and try to do experiments in the kitchen.

Although, most of
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time
we don't cook the dish as delicious as we plan, my
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grandfather
motivates me to
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keep
trying new things even if we fail at it.

This is a reason I
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love
to
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spend
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time
with him.

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He
always ready to do creative and crazy things I unlike my family.

Well, the rest of my
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family
members can always be
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seen
busy in their routine
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work and
they
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think
doing those things which would not benefit us in the future and it is
entirely
a waste of time.

On the other hand
, my
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grandfather
has a
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different
perspective, he believes that we should try all those things which we find amusing.

I am
also
like him and that separate us from others.

My loving
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grandfather
never turns down my
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ideas
of doing crazy things.

That's why, I never miss the boat to
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spend
my
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time
with him.
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IELTS essay Describe one of your family member you spend the most time with - Who is he/she? - What do you usually do together? - What kind of person he/she is? - Why you spend most of the time with him/her?

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16 paragraphs
349 words
5.5
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