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Describe argument between two of your friend

Describe argument between two of your friend 7rNYk
It was my sister’s birthday on 26th May. • I am not very good at choosing presents, so I play it safe. • She loves chocolate cake and so I order it for her every year. • It is kind of a tradition in our house, that I will get a cake. • No one even thinks about it or even asks me. • However, this year due to the lockdown, all the bakery shops were closed. • There is a famous home baker in my city, who bakes on order. • So, next, I tried that, but unfortunately, she was swamped with orders. • She told me she could not deliver the cake by the birthday. • Now, I was in a real pickle. • The only option was to bake a cake myself. • And honestly, I am a horrible cook and I had never even done any sort of baking. • But desperate times call for desperate measures. • So, I opened YouTube and opened the beginner basics video for making a chocolate cake. • I checked the ingredients and we had all of them at home except cream. • I thought I could use milk instead. • And needless to say, that was my first mistake. • Nothing went right from that point on. • My cake dough was runny instead of semi-solid like the video suggested. • My icing tasted awful, probably because of the milk. • I didn’t even dare put it on. • I spent nearly five hours in the kitchen, made a huge mess with flour, cocoa powder on all the shelves and the floor. • The end result was a hard dense awfully tasting something. • My mom told me that I should have asked her for help. • I felt bad that I couldn’t deliver but my family members just couldn’t stop laughing. • I think my embarrassment and the kitchen’s condition made it even more amusing to them • It is now a running joke in our house. • In the middle of any conversation, my parents or my sister randomly bring up the incident and start laughing. • I think they are going to tease me for the rest of my life.
It was my sister’s birthday on 26th May.

• I am not
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very
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good
at choosing presents,
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so
I play it safe.

• She
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loves
chocolate
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cake and
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so
I order it for her every year.

• It is
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kind of a
tradition in our
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house
, that I will
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get
a
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cake. •
No one even
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thinks
about it or even asks me.

•
However
, this year due to the lockdown, all the bakery shops
were closed
.

• There is a
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famous
home baker in my city, who bakes on order.

•
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So
,
next
, I tried that,
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but
unfortunately, she
was swamped
with orders.

• She
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told
me she could not deliver the
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cake
by the birthday.

•
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Now
, I was in a real pickle.

• The
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only
option was to bake a
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cake
myself.

• And
honestly
, I am a horrible cook and I had never even done any sort of baking.

•
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But
desperate times call for desperate measures.

•
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So
, I opened YouTube and opened the beginner basics video for making a chocolate
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cake. •
I
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checked
the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
ingredients and
we had all of them at home except cream.

• I
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thought
I could
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use
milk
instead
.

• And needless to say, that was my
first
mistake.

• Nothing went right from that point on.

• My
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cake
dough was runny
instead
of semi-solid like the video suggested.

• My icing tasted awful,
probably
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because
of the milk.

• I didn’t even dare put it on.

• I spent
nearly
five hours in the kitchen, made a huge mess with flour, cocoa powder on all

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the
shelves and the floor.

• The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
result was a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
dense awfully tasting something.

• My mom
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told
me that I should have asked her for
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help
.

• I felt
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bad
that I couldn’t deliver
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but
my family members
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just
couldn’t
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stop
laughing.

• I
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think
my embarrassment and the kitchen’s condition made it even more amusing to them

• It is
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now
a running joke in our
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house
.

• In the middle of any conversation, my parents or my sister
randomly
bring up the incident

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and
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start
laughing.

• I
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think
they are going to tease me for the rest of my life.
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IELTS essay Describe argument between two of your friend

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  American English
30 paragraphs
374 words
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