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Describe any accomplishments on why it would be a good fit for you (200 words or less)

Describe any accomplishments on why it would be a good fit for you (200 words or less) 1jMG
I supported the business in achieving ISO certificate 9001; while I was working as a PR officer in Adam hospital, I did the data analysis for the customer satisfaction questionnaires. That was my first achievement in the business world. Secondly, I supported the creation of the Costa & Slim chicken applications and website, and I got a team award in 2020 for this achievement. As a SQL certificated developer and administrator, I learned technical methods to store, link. manage, and extracting data, so by learning data statistics and data modeling, I will excel in transforming these data into crucial information. To put it another way, by getting trained in data analysis tools, I can do things such as predictive modeling. This involves analyzing data about a business’s past performance to predict how it will perform in the future and make business decisions accordingly. For example, I can support the business in deciding where to open its next stores. This for sure will give me a tremendous opportunity to get promoted to an executive position in the top-tier. Therefore, as you can see, this program will give me analytic tools and new programming which help in the perfect utilizing of my experience and education.
I supported the
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business
in achieving ISO certificate 9001; while I was working as a PR officer in Adam hospital, I did the
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data
analysis for the customer satisfaction questionnaires. That was my
first
achievement in the
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business
world.
Secondly
, I supported the creation of the Costa & Slim chicken applications and website, and I
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got
a team award in 2020 for this achievement. As
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SQL certificated developer and administrator, I learned technical methods to store, link.
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manage
, and extracting
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data
,
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so
by learning
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data
statistics and
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data
modeling, I will excel in transforming these
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data
into crucial information. To put it another way, by getting trained in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
analysis tools, I can do things such as predictive modeling. This involves analyzing
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data
about a business’s past performance to predict how it will perform in the future and
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make
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business
decisions
accordingly
.
For example
, I can support the
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business
in deciding where to open its
next
stores. This for sure will give me a tremendous opportunity to
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get
promoted to an executive position in the top-tier.
Therefore
, as you can
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see
, this program will give me analytic tools and new programming which
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help
in the perfect utilizing of my experience and education.
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IELTS essay Describe any accomplishments on why it would be a good fit for you (200 words or less)

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