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Describe a wedding you attended - Very trustable, Unique culture Whose wedding was it - cousin Ajay, Fazilka Punjab When was it - It was in 2017 What happened at the wedding - Met Harbhajan mann What is the thing that you most enjoyed - Totally based Punjabi folk and tradition

Describe a wedding you attended - Very trustable, Unique culture Whose wedding was it - cousin Ajay, Fazilka Punjab When was it - It was in 2017 What happened at the wedding - Met Harbhajan mann What is the thing that you most enjoyed - Totally based Punjabi folk and tradition 73yp3
Life is incomplete without a life partner, most of the people has dream that they will marry and become happily married couple. So they search for betterhalf. Marriage fuction is the important festival of our lives it also give detail kwnowledge of our folk and culture. I am very eager to share my experience of marriage fuction which I is always remain in my heart as sweet memories. I have attended my cousin Ajay'smarriage function in 2017 with my wife and daughter geet. It was in very famous marriage palace called "Punjab palace" its in my native "Malout". Theme was totally based on Punjabi culture and folk before the 1947, Where male wear chadra and kurta and like to keep Dang (Big and broad stick)and female dressed up with Salwar kurties with Fulkari(a traditional hand made dupatta) with lots of nadmade arts. Everybody look like typical old punjabi guys an gals. I was suprised with the some other monuments which describe the ancient Punjab. There was cart and artifical well, where people can capture photograph and can store glimps of there life's. My daughter was so excited because it was her first fuction, I gave maximum input about our culture and flashback of punjabi tradition. Geet was very happy and she felt like she is on the Top or the world, I met with some relative after 10 to 12 years, it was very woderful and heart touching experince and I got emotional most of the time becuase I was missing my dear one's. Marriage ceremony was full of surprise for me and my family, another big moment of my life was waiting for me. Once the folk dance and song fuction start everybody run into hall becuase famous singer Mr. Harbhajan Mann was on the state, I was speechless when I saw celebrety Mr. Mann. My uncle kept it as suprise elements for all. When Mr. Mann started his first song everbody start Bhangra (Punjabi folk dance). Even me and my family participated and enjoyed bhangra, Those mpoments was eye catching for me. After some time got chance to had some photo session with great singer. Really throught the whole fuction I love each and every moments but Harbhajan Mann's presents was most happiest and enjoyable for me. I have attend lots of others fuction but this marriage was heart touching moments for me it create place in my heart and mind. It gave us informative moments of our great culture, tradtions and also tought me any my daughter how we can keep in touch with our culture.
Life is incomplete without a life partner, most of the
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people
has dream that they will marry and become
happily
married couple.

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So
they search for
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betterhalf
.
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Marriage
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fuction
is the
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important
festival of our
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lives
it
also
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give
detail
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kwnowledge
of our
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folk
and culture.

I am
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very
eager to share my experience of
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marriage
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fuction
which I is always
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remain
in my
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heart
as sweet memories.

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smarriage
function in 2017 with my wife and daughter
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geet
. It was in
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very
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famous
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marriage
palace called
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"
Punjab palace
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"


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its
in my native
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"
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Malout
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"
. Theme was
totally
based on Punjabi
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culture
and
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folk
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before
the 1947, Where male wear
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chadra
and
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kurta
and like to
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keep
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Dang


(
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Big
and broad stick)and female dressed up with Salwar
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kurties
with
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Fulkari
(a traditional hand made
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dupatta
) with lots of
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nadmade
arts. Everybody
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look
like typical
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old


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punjabi
guys
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an gals
. I was
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suprised
with the
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some
other monuments which
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describe
the ancient Punjab. There was cart and
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artifical
well,
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where


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people
can capture photograph and can store
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glimps
of there life's. My daughter was
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so
excited
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because
it was her
first
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fuction
, I gave
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maximum


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input
about our
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culture
and flashback of
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punjabi
tradition.
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Geet
was
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very
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happy and
she felt like she is on the Top or the world, I met with
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some


relative after 10 to 12 years, it was
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very
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woderful
and
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heart
touching
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experince
and I
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got
emotional most of the time
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becuase
I was missing my

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dear
one's.

Marriage ceremony was full of surprise for me and my family, another
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big
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moment
of my life was waiting for me. Once the
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folk
dance and song
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fuction


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start
everybody run into hall
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becuase
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famous
singer Mr.
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Harbhajan
Mann was on the state, I was speechless when I
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saw
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celebrety
Mr. Mann. My
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uncle


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kept
it as
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suprise
elements for all.
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When
Mr. Mann
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started
his
first
song
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everbody
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start
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Bhangra
(Punjabi
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folk
dance). Even me and my family participated

and enjoyed
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bhangra
, Those
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mpoments
was eye catching for me.
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After
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some
time
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got
chance
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to had
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some
photo session with great singer.
Really


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throught
the whole
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fuction
I
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love
each and every
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moments
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but
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Harbhajan
Mann's presents was
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most happiest
and enjoyable for me.

I have
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attend
lots of others
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fuction
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but
this
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marriage
was
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heart
touching
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moments
for me it
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create
place in my
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heart
and mind. It gave
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us


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informative
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moments
of our great
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culture
,
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tradtions
and
also
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tought
me
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any my daughter
how we can
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keep
in touch with our
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culture
.
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IELTS essay Describe a wedding you attended - Very trustable, Unique culture Whose wedding was it - cousin Ajay, Fazilka Punjab When was it - It was in 2017 What happened at the wedding - Met Harbhajan mann What is the thing that you most enjoyed - Totally based Punjabi folk and tradition

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