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People have more choices now agree or disagre

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irrefutably, in this contemporary era, due to advancement of technology people have more option available. I am agree with this notion because masses do not have to face obstacle in order to pursue education and employment. To commence, there could be multifarious justification which are supporting to my viewpoint. Firstly, students have more choices of education that in which field they want to do study they have option of vary kinds of school like as national or international even for poor pupils government institutions are situated where they can do their study without social discrimination. For instance, now a days, the ratio of literate people was on it's peak point instead of past days instead of heater years. Apart from that, It also leads to many source of earning money because of education there are many job opportunities have increased. Further more, people are now no longer would not do face to face shopping as they like to buy products online through which they can not merely because earn money but also because of can do shopping at home. More over, the chchages in communication can not be over looked people can communicate with other online by using social media. For instance in new year's people can communicate with each other using their To sum up, I believe that now people living standard is totally changed, they have many areas in which they have multifarious benefits to use in the other work.
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irrefutably
, in this contemporary era, due to advancement of technology
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people
have more option available. I am
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agree
with this notion
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because
masses do not
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have to
face obstacle in order to pursue education and employment. To commence, there could be multifarious justification which are supporting to my viewpoint.
Firstly
, students have more choices of education that in which field they want to do study they have option of vary kinds of school like as national or international even for poor pupils
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government
institutions
are situated
where they can do their study without social discrimination.
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,
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now a days
, the ratio of literate
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people
was on it's peak point
instead
of past days
instead
of heater years. Apart from that, It
also
leads to
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many source
of earning money
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because
of education there are
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many
job opportunities have increased.

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more,
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people
are
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now
no longer would not do face to face shopping as they like to
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buy
products online through which they can not
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because
earn money
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but
also
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of can
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do shopping
at home. More over, the
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chchages
in communication can not be
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over looked
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people
can communicate with other online by using social media.
For instance
in new year's
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people
can communicate with each other using their

To sum up, I believe that
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now
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people
living standard is
totally
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changed
, they have
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many
areas in which they have multifarious benefits to
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IELTS essay People have more choices now agree or disagre

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
242 words
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