Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Describe a present or gift someone gave you that you really liked.

I want to talk about a present i really liked and cherished, i chose to talk about this particular gift because it was the most memoirable gift i have ever recieved. I got this present on my 16th birthday from my grandpa before he died the following year, i really like this gift because i love my grandpa with all my heart and this was the very first and last gift i recieved from him before he passed away. I got a 18 karat gold necklace from him that had little locket with a picture of us together from the last Christmas we had together, the day we took the picture was a memorable day i had with my family, that day is a day i will always remember because of the sweet memories. Even after the passing of my grandpa, this gift he left me will forever remain a cherish able and profound gift.
I want to talk about a present
Is this the personal pronoun “I”? It is spelled uppercase.
i
really
liked and cherished,
Is this the personal pronoun “I”? It is spelled uppercase.
i
chose to talk about this particular
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gift
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it was the most
Possible spelling mistake found.
memoirable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gift
Is this the personal pronoun “I”? It is spelled uppercase.
i
have ever
Possible spelling mistake found.
recieved
. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
this present on my 16th birthday from my grandpa
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
died
the following year,
Is this the personal pronoun “I”? It is spelled uppercase.
i
really
like this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gift
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
Is this the personal pronoun “I”? It is spelled uppercase.
i
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
my grandpa with all my heart and this was the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
first
and last
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gift
i
Possible spelling mistake found.
recieved
from him
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
he passed away.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
Use “an” instead of ‘a’ if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. ‘an article’, ‘an hour’.
a
A hyphen is missing if you mean the unit of fineness (gold, diamonds).
18 karat
gold necklace from him that had
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
locket with a picture of us together from the last Christmas we had together, the day we took the picture was a memorable day
Is this the personal pronoun “I”? It is spelled uppercase.
i
had with my family, that day is a day
Did you mean “I”?
i
will always remember
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the sweet memories. Even after the passing of my grandpa, this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gift
he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
me will forever remain
After ‘a’, do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of ‘cherish’ is correct. If ‘cherish’ is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
a cherish
able and profound
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gift
.

IELTS essay Describe a present or gift someone gave you that you really liked.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
155 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Describe a present or gift someone gave you that you really liked.