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Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt Explain your choice using specific reasons and examples

Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt Explain your choice using specific reasons and examples nm7g
Globally, myriad customs are followed by the people and it holds essential values ​​in their lives. Unknowingly, customs have become the hallmark of various nations. Many countries share similar customs, so some other countries have different customs. Similarly, India is a country where people believe in their customs and customs very much and there are few that can be adopted by other counties. I will clarify further in this easy. In India, aged people stays with their families and their children have the honour of taking care of their parents. This custom allow elders to receive best care, love and affection of their family for their children and grand kids. Unlike in the western societies, parents are not left alone to fight with their serenity at their last stage of life. If our parents endure immense predicament to raise us, we must not leave them alone when they have given us their every treasure and in return demanding merely love form us. taking good care and living with our parents gives us immense pleasure of humanity. Also, in joint families people come together at the time of emergency and are readily available to help their fellow relative who is in the state of despair. For example, once in my family, my cousin sister had an road accident. The emergency operation immediately demanded a deposit of Rupees two lakh in the hospital. My uncle, who has a nominal income, was unable to arrange for this huge sum of money in such a short of time. At that moment, all family members united together and individually contributed Rupees 10, 000 for the operation and hence with the coherent effort of all the family members and my uncle, the desired amount was arranged and finally operation was conducted successfully. Similarly, in other emergency or problems like financial problems, moral and society issues etc. members of the joint family gives an individual the strength and courage needed to fight that situation and also help as far as suitable and possible. To conclude, I would like advocate the Indian culture of living together in joint families in the foreign countries as family members live together happily with unity under one roof. Also joint families are more happy and united at the time of hardships, which helps us to fight those situations and merge out as winners.
Globally, myriad customs
are followed
by the
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people
and it holds essential values ​​in their
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lives
.
Unknowingly
, customs have become the hallmark of various nations.
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Many
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countries
share similar customs,
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so
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some
other
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countries
have
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different
customs.
Similarly
, India is a
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country
where
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people
believe in their customs and customs
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very
much and there are few that can
be adopted
by other counties. I will clarify
further
in this easy. In India, aged
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people
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stays
with their
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families
and their children have the
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honour
of taking care of their
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parents
. This
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custom
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allow
elders to receive best care,
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love
and affection of their
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family
for their children and grand kids. Unlike in the western societies,
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parents
are not
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left
alone to fight with their serenity at their last stage of life. If our
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parents
endure immense predicament to raise us, we
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must
not
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leave
them alone when they have
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given
us their every treasure and in return demanding
merely
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love
form us. taking
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good
care and living with our
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parents
gives us immense pleasure of humanity.
Also
, in
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joint
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families
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people
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come
together at the time of emergency and are
readily
available to
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help
their fellow relative who is in the state of despair.
For example
, once in my
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family
, my cousin sister had
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an
road accident. The emergency operation immediately demanded a deposit of Rupees two lakh in the hospital. My uncle, who has a nominal income, was unable to arrange for this huge sum of money in such a short of time. At that moment, all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
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members
united together and
individually
contributed Rupees 10, 000 for the operation and
hence
with the coherent effort of all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
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members
and my uncle, the desired amount
was arranged
and
finally
operation
was conducted
successfully
.
Similarly
, in other emergency or problems like financial problems, moral and society issues etc.
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members
of the
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joint
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family
gives an individual the strength and courage needed to fight that situation and
also
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help
as far as suitable and possible.

To conclude
, I would like advocate the Indian culture of living together in
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joint
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families
in the foreign
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countries
as
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family
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members
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live
together
happily
with unity under one roof.
Also
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joint
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families
are more happy and united at the time of hardships, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
us to fight those situations and merge out as winners.
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IELTS essay Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt Explain your choice using specific reasons and examples

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
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