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Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the world, with serious results for the environment. What do you think can be done to solve this problem?

Cutting down trees from a large area is still highly practiced by humans, globally. This will give severe damage to the environment, such as climate change and animals extinctions. In my opinion, there are many possible means in general, to inhibit the harm of deforestation. It will involve various stakeholders; including government officials, companies, and most importantly, the citizens themselves. The government officials have to be fully aware of the danger of deforestation; therefore, this will make them serious and strict when implementing some policies or programs that intended to protect the natural world. The policies and programs they could make are varied; they can give higher tax for logging, strengthen illegal logging supervision, reinforce corruption laws, and increase public awareness to protect the environment. If the authority can practice their plans perfectly, then companies will have no choice but to obey. In the case for the citizens, we can protect the environment by keeping track of how the authority works. Are the policies that they assembled environment-friendly? Are the policies being implemented fairly? This kind of questions needs to be asked. The citizens may also contribute by starting from small things such as consuming less, recycling, using paper bags or planting trees at home. As I am currently working in a non-profit organization that focuses on climate change, I am quite familiar with this subject. There are already many organizations and people from various backgrounds who are concerned about this matter and have done their best to solve it. Nevertheless, their work can only reach a small area. We understand that the government plays a crucial role, but what they do currently have not fully taken sides to the natural world. Overall, there are many ways to defend the natural world. However, it will require cooperation and collaboration from each element of the society.
Cutting down trees from a large area is
still
highly
practiced by humans, globally. This will give severe damage to the environment, such as climate
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change
and animals extinctions. In my opinion, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
possible means
in general
, to inhibit the harm of deforestation. It will involve various stakeholders; including
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
officials,
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companies
, and most
importantly
, the citizens themselves.

The
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government
officials
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have to
be
fully
aware of the
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danger
of deforestation;
therefore
, this will
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make
them serious and strict when implementing
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some
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policies
or programs that intended to protect the natural world. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
policies
and programs they could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
are varied
; they can give higher tax for logging, strengthen illegal logging supervision, reinforce corruption laws, and increase public awareness to protect the environment. If the authority can practice their plans
perfectly
, then
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companies
will have no choice
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but
to obey.

In the case for the citizens, we can protect the environment by keeping
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
track
of how the authority works. Are the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
policies
that they assembled environment-friendly? Are the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
policies
being implemented
fairly
? This kind of questions needs to
be asked
. The citizens may
also
contribute by starting from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
things such as consuming less, recycling, using paper bags or planting trees at home.

As I am
currently
working in a non-profit organization that focuses on climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
, I am quite familiar with this subject. There are already
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
organizations and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
from various backgrounds who
are concerned
about this matter and have done their best to solve it.
Nevertheless
, their work can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
reach a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
area. We understand that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
plays a crucial role,
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but
what they do
currently
have not
fully
taken sides to the natural world.

Overall
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
ways to defend the natural world.
However
, it will require cooperation and collaboration from each element of the society.
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IELTS essay Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the world, with serious results for the environment. What do you think can be done to solve this problem?

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