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Cultural Shock is a new worrying concern for few immigrants. What are the few possible options to eradicate this?

Cultural Shock is a new worrying concern for few immigrants. What are the few possible options to eradicate this? aqG27
At this moment in time, it is stated that cultural shock is a real concern for newcomers. Although immigrants realize all the risks of the immigration process, such as language barrier, separation with dearest and nearest and the beginning of a new life from scratch, some measures are bound to be implemented in countries to simplify the adaptation of immigrants in a new community. The first solution to change this situation can be special organizations for newcomers. Undoubtedly, starting a new life in a country is troublesome. Immigrants have a plethora of issues to be tackled, for example, booking the first accommodation, improving a foreign language, finding a new job, etc. I am convinced that some of these problems can be solved with the help of special people and voluntary institutions. The vivid example of this situation is Canada, where there are a lot of such organizations within the country for helping immigrants. Not only do they provide all the information about rules and laws in the new country, but they also facilitate both finding a job and booking a flat. Another point to consider which may help in the situation is strict to the rules for application of immigration. From my perspective, an immigrant should be well-familiarized with a new language and be a professional in a particular area to integrate in a new society without any problems. Not only does it help to improve economy of the country but it also significantly increases chances of getting a job, as a result, having an opportunity to provide everything for themselves and their family. For instance, to obtain the most famous visa in the USA called H1-B people are required to show English skills and outstanding achievements at work. In conclusion, albeit the immigration process is a severe trial for a person, some decisions in countries should be made to ease this way. These can be the help of voluntary organizations and clear and strict rules for immigration applications.
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is stated
that cultural shock is a real concern for newcomers. Although
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immigrants
realize all the
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risks
of the
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immigration
process, such as language barrier, separation with dearest and nearest and the beginning of a
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new
life from scratch,
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some
measures
are bound
to
be implemented
in
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countries
to simplify the adaptation of
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immigrants
in a
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new
community.

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first
solution to
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change
this situation can be special organizations for newcomers.
Undoubtedly
, starting a
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new
life in a
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country
is troublesome.
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Immigrants
have a plethora of issues to
be tackled
,
for example
, booking the
first
accommodation, improving a foreign language, finding a
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new
job, etc. I
am convinced
that
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some
of these problems can
be solved
with the
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help
of special
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people
and voluntary institutions. The vivid example of this situation is Canada, where there are
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a lot of
such organizations within the
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country
for helping
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immigrants
. Not
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only
do they provide all the information about
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rules
and laws in the
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new
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country
,
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but
they
also
facilitate both finding a job and booking a flat.

Another point to consider which may
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help
in the situation is strict to the
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rules
for application of
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immigration
. From my perspective, an
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immigrant
should be well-familiarized with a
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new
language and be a professional in a particular area to integrate in a
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new
society without any problems. Not
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only
does it
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help
to
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improve
economy of the
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country
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but
it
also
significantly
increases chances of getting a job,
as a result
, having an opportunity to provide everything for themselves and their family.
For instance
, to obtain the most
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famous
visa in the USA called H1-B
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people
are required
to
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show
English
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skills
and outstanding achievements at work.

In conclusion
, albeit the
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immigration
process is a severe trial for a person,
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some
decisions in
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countries
should
be made
to
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ease
this way. These can be the
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help
of voluntary organizations and
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clear
and strict
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rules
for
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immigration
applications.
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IELTS essay Cultural Shock is a new worrying concern for few immigrants. What are the few possible options to eradicate this?

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  American English
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329 words
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