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Countries should not isolate themselves from the world but instead engage other countries.

Countries should not isolate themselves from the world but instead engage other countries. 3a7nn
The topic to address is countries should believe in cooperation rather than isolation. This topic is important because it serves as major decision for smooth running of the country. I agree with the idea that countries should cooperate with each other because it may lead them to support each other in difficult times. The first reason that enables me to believe in countries cooperation is that it results in trade between countries. Such trade of items allows one country to earn from other nations. This earning is necessary for government to provide quality education, health facilities and hygenic food to its citizens. Therefore, in order for countries to earn more, cooperation between them is necessary. The second major reason of cooperation between countries is to help them in difficult times. For example, if one country is left behind such that it has no any basic resources to run prosperously, then other countries may help them in funding. This is not always unidirectional, it might be the case that the helping country fall back. Thus, it will be morally applicable to the previously helped country to help fallen back nation. Therefore, it is clear that, this cycle is only possible with cooperation between countries. Finally, it is also necessary for citizens of one nation to know about the cultrue of other countries. Since this helps them to gain experience about life of alien people and adopt some of their good qualities. Although, the citizens might be enthusiastic to learn about other cultures, an isolated government can deprive them from such learning. Therefore, in order for government to allow its citizens to experience other cultures, it must cooperate with other parts of the world, so that they issue visa to its citizens without any hindrance. Thus, It agree with idea of cooperation instead of isolation because cooperation is bilaterally advantageous for smooth running between countries and development of their citizens.
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countries
should believe in
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cooperation
rather
than isolation. This topic is
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important
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because
it serves as major decision for smooth running of the
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country
. I
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agree
with the
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idea
that
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countries
should cooperate with each
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other
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because
it may lead them to support each
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other
in difficult times.

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first
reason that enables me to believe in
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countries
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cooperation
is that it results in trade between
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countries
. Such trade of items
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allows
one
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country
to earn from
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other
nations. This earning is necessary for
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government
to provide quality education, health facilities and
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hygenic
food to its
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citizens
.
Therefore
, in order for
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countries
to earn more,
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cooperation
between them is necessary.

The second major reason of
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cooperation
between
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countries
is to
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help
them in difficult times.
For example
, if one
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country
is
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left
behind such that it has
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no
any basic resources to run
prosperously
, then
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other
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countries
may
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help
them in funding. This is not always unidirectional, it might be the case that the helping
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country
fall back.
Thus
, it will be
morally
applicable to the previously
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helped
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country
to
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help
fallen back nation.
Therefore
, it is
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clear
that, this cycle is
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only
possible with
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cooperation
between countries.

Finally
, it is
also
necessary for
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citizens
of one nation to know about the
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cultrue
of
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other
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countries
. Since
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this
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helps
them to gain experience about life of alien
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people
and adopt
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some
of their
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good
qualities. Although, the
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citizens
might be enthusiastic to learn about
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other
cultures, an isolated
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government
can
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deprive them from
such learning.
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, in order for
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government
to
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allow
its
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citizens
to experience
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other
cultures, it
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must
cooperate with
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other
parts of the world,
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so
that they issue visa to its
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citizens
without any hindrance.

Thus
, It
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agree
with
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idea
of
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cooperation
instead
of isolation
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because
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cooperation
is
bilaterally
advantageous for smooth running between
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countries
and development of their
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citizens
.
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IELTS essay Countries should not isolate themselves from the world but instead engage other countries.

Essay
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5 paragraphs
318 words
6.0
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