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Countries becoming more and more similar because people are more able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Countries becoming more and more similar because people are more able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? 15krG

It is argued that diversity between countries becomes more and more invisible due to products that have been selling all around the world. I believe that it is a negative thing because it harms societies both culturally and economically. First of all, nations live with their sociological background. This is why they are strictly bounded in their religions, cuisines, arts. . . When it comes to shopping, we tend to buy things that are related to our cultures. For instance, in Turkey, Chinese cuisine is generally not liked and people don't buy them. However, it becomes more and more popular to eat Chinese food in Turkey. Eating local foods, on the other hand, become less and less. I think that this will damage our eating habits in time and we will be seeing the same foods in every corner of the world. Secondly, selling the same products all around the globe has created massive capitalist firms. These corporates are damaging local producers and sellers. Let's look at Starbucks as an example. Before Starbucks entered Turkey there were lots of cafes that you could see all corners of the streets. However, once it built up its massive cafes, local shops went bankrupt one by one. In the big picture, you can see that this will create huge problems related to the monopolies that they created. All in all, selling the same products all around the world is a serious problem for cultural diversities, which we are losing day by day. It also creates economic problems for local firms, producers and sellers.

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negative
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because
 it harms societies both culturally
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.

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First of all
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live
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, it becomes more and more popular to eat Chinese food in Turkey. Eating You use this word too often, consider replacing it withprovincialregional
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 foods, on the other hand
, become less and less. I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
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 that this will damage our eating habits in Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).time, and
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 we will be seeing the same foods in every corner of the world.

Secondly
, selling the same products all around the globe has created massive capitalist firms. These Possible spelling mistake found.corporatecorp orates
corporates
 are damaging You use this word too often, consider replacing it withprovincialregional
local
 producers and sellers. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
Let
's look at Starbucks as an example. “Before” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Before
 Starbucks entered Turkey there were lots of 'cafes' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "cafés"cafés
cafes
 that you could This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 all corners of the streets. However
, once it built up its massive 'cafes' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "cafés"cafés
cafes
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withprovincialregional
local
 shops went bankrupt one by one. In the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hugeenormousgiganticvast
big
 picture, you can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 that this will create huge problems related to the monopolies that they created.

All in all, selling the same products all around the world is a serious problem for cultural diversities, which we are losing day by day. It also
 creates economic problems for You use this word too often, consider replacing it withprovincialregional
local
 firms, producers and sellers. 