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What we had learned from one piece

What we had learned from one piece XyXow
Being a hero is a heavy burden only a few able to hold it, to fly with it. We can hardly find the reason of why people become a hero instead of becoming the average person. It would be hard to determine, to define, who’s a hero, who’s a villain, in this increasingly wild, wild, world. But, historical accounts have defined who are eligible to be a hero, since the hero is the person who wins, and the winner takes all, and the winner gets to write history. Yet, the myth of heroes is not monopolized by mere historical accounts, but by works of fictions as well. Picture taken from another website This writing holds the assumption that what are found in works of fiction can be also found in real life. Thus, the wisdom drawn from fiction are also applicable in real life. This is a piece of writing that considers the story of One Piece (written by Eiichiro Oda) so I really, really, mean it when I state this: heavy spoilers. “I am going to be the pirate king! ” When Luffy asked why he wanted to be a pirate king in One Piece, he said that he wants freedom. He declined to be the captain of the Strawhat armada because he could lose his freedom (and so the armada leaders decided to become Luffy’s subordinates by their own freedom). Does Luffy really mean it? Does he really going to be the pirate king for the freedom? Why doubt, though? Seeing through Luffy’s past during the flashbacks, we can see several scenes important towards his decision of being the pirate king. Even though this is a work of fiction, we can find wisdom in it. Rene Girard finds wisdom mainly in works of fiction that are applicable in the real world. We can find Luffy’s reason(s) from the first telling of the story. First, we can see Shanks lost his left arm for saving Luffy. After, Shanks gave him the late pirate king’s straw hat. Shanks is also the first person to hear that Luffy is going to be the pirate king in Luffy’s own words. In a blink in that arc, Luffy went away for his journey to become the pirate king, leaving his village after a long time. The first reason has Shanks as the model for Luffy to become the pirate king. This by itself can become a reason for the protagonist to make the story go forward. Luffy was deeply moved because previously, he thought he lost his blood brother, Sabo. Second, he thought Sabo was dead among the pyres of Gray Terminal. This traumatized Luffy because previously, he needed to prove to his older brother that he can be a pirate. They even shared cups with Ace as well to prove that they are blood brothers. Say, the thing about Sabo is an indirect cause for Luffy to become a pirate king. The second reason has Sabo as the catharsis for Luffy to become a pirate. Deeply traumatized, Luffy needs to overcome the trauma to keep on living. By storyline, “the death of Sabo” is the first loss Luffy has ever experienced. Third, not the least, it’s about Ace. Luffy saw Ace as an example of how a life should be lived. Ace’s a pirate, and a strong one at that. Luffy also saw Ace and the Whitebeard pirates as hindrance to become the pirate king. But, Ace and Whitebeard died on the war. Now this is a real trauma, as the audiences can experience it as well; because Luffy thought that both of his blood brothers are dead (Sabo didn’t die; just moved with the Revolutionaries). The harder thing was that Ace died in front of him, in front of the audiences as well. From this point of the story, Luffy decided to become stronger. Now, what are the real reason of why someone decided to become stronger? What Luffy has identified that he finds in the people he’s helping? We shall continue immediately with the question. First, the reason is about loss. Luffy lost the people he dear. In turn, he decided to become stronger so at least he can protect the people he dear, and ultimately to become the pirate king. Second, Luffy has this logical sympathy towards people without the assurance whether that the something a person hold dear might survive. Luffy is strong so he just can help people, and he identifies with the people who must suffer from the perception that something dear to them might gone — the strong do what they can, and the weak suffer what they must. Luffy is strong and weak at the same time; it’s what makes Luffy still human, even though it’s a fictional universe. Luffy goes to see that he must not lose to protect, and if possible, other people don’t have to lose, too. This is clear in the Baroques Works Saga, when Luffy disarmed Miss Wednesday/Nefertari Vivi and to uncover her royal mission and let Nico Robin join the crew. Luffy will always try to befriend. If it’s not possible, Luffy will try to make the other person lose, as he has done towards his opponents. Luffy draws a line between us and them when it comes to losses. If the said person might lose something dear to them, Luffy will come to their aid. If the person has nothing to lose, and especially, makes other people’s lives at risk, that person is the enemy for Luffy. With that said, Luffy can avoid useless battles against the Marines or other pirates, even though the said opponent is weak. Now, I don’t want to linger on Luffy’s story anymore just because I have slept through it and still didn’t find any other ways to continue linger in his story. You see, the two reasons above are both sound reasons; they can complement each other, they can substitute each other — they can interact with each other. I don’t try to make any persuasion here, but I just want to vent out my current thoughts on one small aspect of leadership (however persuasive my words can be). Now, what is there to do when there are rival reasons, each of them sounds towards the audience? People has always in need of reasons, whether there are any real reasons or not. Let’s understand more about reason. Reasons are, in fact, unnecessary in action. What’s necessary is conviction, and conviction may only come from reasons. Don’t let this confuse you, as you can see that reason is the indirect cause of action — it doesn’t directly influence action — and for both to interact with each other, they needed the medium of conviction. What I have been doing right now is to gather all the sound reasons to put into conviction. It’s like a diesel machine; you put solar into them and in turns into energy. Afterwards, all the reasons got burned up into the conviction until it doesn’t matter anymore — at least the human sense can’t sense its residues anymore. Now, to do things with reason, you don’t have to do any “real” things with reason. All reason can do is to serve as a proof of story whether that story is being “logical” or not. What are truly real are actions, and what are truly logical are actions — just like the day of marriage, when your love finally turned into an institution with its own rules and punishment. From actions, stories emerge. But stories may emerge from lies as well, as lies can also be reasonable. Remember that stories can be made into reasons. This is the reason to doubt the reason of why Luffy wants to be the pirate king — perhaps it’s just an intricate lie woven by the lips of men, but after all it’s a work of fiction. What we’re enjoying is a work of fiction, yet we’re still convinced of Luffy’s conviction on becoming the pirate king. All reasons, true or false, are burned as fuel in the human conviction machine. When the machine moved, whether the machine suffers from a more abuse of usage, it won’t really matter as the human conviction machine can repair itself either physically, emotionally, mentally, or spiritually. Maybe it suffered from the fuel known as lies. Maybe the abuse is minimum when the fuel is honesty. Maybe it won’t move when the fuel is dishonesty. When the machine has already moved, the reason does not matter — they’re gone into thin air. Especially when there are rival reasons of conviction, all the thing a human can do is to disregard those reasons and move with conviction. Movements are natural for human, and thus enjoyable — conviction is enjoyable. As movements and convictions are enjoyable to a human, it is a state of flow where a person is experiencing the optimal experience. Flow happens in street fights, seduction efforts, and in efforts to broaden the erudition. It feels like your brain is working optimally, your brain is generating more neurons than before, unlike the times you’re stressed beyond measure that you choose to space out. Flow cannot become the fuel of conviction as flow is the state of being, the phenomenon, observed in people with conviction. The human conviction machine cannot optimally mix observation and practice at the same time (observing practice and practicing observation sounds about the same in theory, but they’re contrasting practices). This is how academia just can’t separate between theory and practice, since it’s their job to theorize everything into theory, while practitioners are just doing it like flipping their hands (except when they’re handicapped). Now, to return to our story, for Luffy, the reason doesn’t really matter — or, he can just say that there’s no reason at all. He would keep on beating Yonkous on their games ’til he dies (the ending nobody expected, maybe). But, why though, does he have to beat Yonkous? Why does he have to become the hero who defeated the Yonkous? Why should he become a hero? I’ll repeat once, you dimwit: the reason doesn’t really matter. What mattered is the scale of conviction being held by a person. With conviction comes strength, and with strength comes power, then responsibility, more power, more responsibility, etc. Eventually, you shoulder all the world into your body, and the world relied on you for whatever you have. But interestingly, you can only suck all the world when you have a hole in you, a space in you people can come to. At first, it might come as an injury for you. But actually people can shelter in it, as the caveman shelters on a cave. So, when you imagine yourself as a black hole, it means that you can suck things into you, and the things will enjoy it as they need a shelter to stay. Imagine the size of an injury if you want to hold all the people in the world. Luffy fits this requirement very well. He has a hole in his heart, which is the loss of Ace right in front of him (all the remnants of Whitebeard’s crew have this hole of Whitebeard, but we’re discussing about Luffy here). As a story teller, Oda can stretch Luffy’s hole, for metaphorically and characteristically, he’s the protagonist and the rubber man of the story. Being this flexible and gains from injury, or should I say disorder of the world around you, are a set of true human superpower — you won’t need to become a rubber man like Luffy to become a superhero. All you need is an injury, and make a story out of it, make a reason out of it, and burn it into your conviction ’til it doesn’t matter anymore (it could still matter so you can repeat the burning process). This is the real undiscovered path of superheroes. Even though at first, your movements aren’t graceful, you will learn. Even though at first, you’re not enjoying the ride, you will. People will flock to you, celebrate you, even though it’s only for your existence. They will thank you for being alive. Sounds like mass manipulation, I know, but if you follow One Piece closely, the only meaningful manipulation is the storytelling, and that’s all you need to start — maybe another injury or two. Now, I’m not trying to tell you what to do, but rather to show you that it is possible to imitate your idol. All idols are built upon violence — at least the injury or losses they already have in their hearts. If you see human violence as a problem, then you’re a problem, too, for you a human as well. I cannot stop you from viewing violence as a problem, but I realize that violence has always been the state of the human nature, sometimes being used, sometimes peace. We have always lived in periods of war, periods of peace, sometimes with heavy abuse of violence, sometimes without. The final use of violence, in every period, is to bring an everlasting peace with the introduction of prohibition and rituals as the first human institutions. It is also prohibition and rituals that made religion possible at first, enabling longer periods of peace relative to the observed period. The evolution of modern humans is the evolution of institutions: from culture, religion, kingdoms, nation-state, to high technology companies. This modern evolution happened in jumps, namely the has-never-been-and-will-never-be-expected scapegoat mechanism, in which it doesn’t matter whether the scapegoat is innocent or not. A hint of responsibility, power, or uniqueness, among the characteristic of the scapegoat will be enough to determine whether one can be a scapegoat (imagine Hitler and the dead Jews). Scapegoat mechanism is responsible for all phases of modern human evolution, for it serves as the origin of all human institutions. Now tell me again, prior to his death, is Ace guilty or innocent? Is it wrong for Whitebeard to treat his crew as his family? From the wimpiest to the bulkiest to the manliest of man, from the most effeminate to the most tomboy, I have plenty friends cried like a baby witnessing the execution of Portgas D. Ace, sympathizing with his death — they cried when they read it, and they usually read alone just because they don’t know what will happen next. It tells me that losses are universal human experience best enjoyed alone (I know, for I cried as well). Everybody can experience loss, whether innocent or guilty, whether active or passive; it really doesn’t matter. The scapegoat mechanism has always been that unexpected in having its victims (in Rene Girard’s terms, “the surrogate victim”).
Being a hero is a heavy burden
only
a few able to
hold
it, to
fly
with it. We can hardly
find
the
reason
of why
people
become
a hero
instead
of becoming the average
person
. It would be
hard
to determine, to define,
who’s
a hero,
who’s
a villain, in this
increasingly
wild, wild,
world
.
But
, historical accounts have defined
who
are eligible to be a hero, since the hero is the
person
who
wins, and the winner takes all, and the winner
gets
to write history.
Yet
, the myth of heroes is not monopolized by mere historical accounts,
but
by works of
fictions
as well
.

Picture taken from another website

This writing
holds
the assumption that what
are found
in works of
fiction
can be
also
found in
real
life.
Thus
, the wisdom drawn from
fiction
are
also
applicable in
real
life. This is a
piece
of writing that considers the
story
of One
Piece
(written by
Eiichiro
Oda
)
so
I
really
,
really
, mean it when I
state
this: heavy spoilers.

“I am going to be the
pirate
king
! ” When
Luffy
asked why he wanted to be a
pirate
king
in One
Piece
, he said that he
wants
freedom. He declined to be the captain of the
Strawhat
armada
because
he could
lose
his freedom (and
so
the armada leaders
decided
to
become
Luffy
’s subordinates by their
own
freedom).

Does
Luffy
really
mean it?
Does
he
really
going to be the
pirate
king
for the freedom? Why doubt, though?

Seeing through
Luffy
’s past during the flashbacks, we can
see
several scenes
important
towards his decision of being the
pirate
king
.
Even though
this is a
work
of
fiction
, we can
find
wisdom in it. Rene
Girard
finds
wisdom
mainly
in works of
fiction
that are applicable in the
real
world
. We can
find
Luffy
’s
reason(s)
from the
first
telling of the story.

First
, we can
see
Shanks lost his
left
arm for saving
Luffy
.
After
, Shanks gave him the late
pirate
king’s
straw hat. Shanks is
also
the
first
person
to hear that
Luffy
is going to be the
pirate
king
in
Luffy
’s
own
words. In a blink in that arc,
Luffy
went away for his journey to
become
the
pirate
king
, leaving his village after a long time.

The
first
reason
has Shanks as the model for
Luffy
to
become
the
pirate
king
. This by itself can
become
a
reason
for the protagonist to
make
the
story
go forward.
Luffy
was
deeply
moved
because
previously, he
thought
he lost his blood
brother
,
Sabo
.

Second, he
thought
Sabo
was dead among the pyres of Gray Terminal. This traumatized
Luffy
because
previously, he needed to prove to his older
brother
that he can be a
pirate
. They even shared cups with Ace as
well
to prove that they are blood
brothers
. Say, the thing about
Sabo
is an indirect cause for
Luffy
to
become
a
pirate
king.

The second
reason
has
Sabo
as the catharsis for
Luffy
to
become
a
pirate
.
Deeply
traumatized,
Luffy
needs
to overcome the trauma to
keep
on living. By storyline, “the death of
Sabo
” is the
first
loss
Luffy
has ever experienced.

Third, not the least, it’s about Ace.
Luffy
saw
Ace as an example of how a life should be
lived
. Ace’s a
pirate
, and a
strong
one at that.
Luffy
also
saw
Ace and the
Whitebeard
pirates
as hindrance to
become
the
pirate
king
.
But
, Ace and
Whitebeard
died
on the war.

Now
this is a
real
trauma, as the audiences can experience it as
well
;
because
Luffy
thought
that both of his blood
brothers
are dead (
Sabo
didn’t
die
;
just
moved
with the Revolutionaries). The harder thing was that Ace
died
in front of him, in front of the audiences as
well
. From this point of the
story
,
Luffy
decided
to
become
stronger.

Now
, what are the
real
reason
of why someone
decided
to
become
stronger? What
Luffy
has identified that he
finds
in the
people
he’s
helping? We shall continue immediately with the question.

First
, the
reason
is about
loss
.
Luffy
lost the
people
he
dear. In turn, he
decided
to
become
stronger
so
at least he can protect the
people
he
dear, and
ultimately
to
become
the
pirate
king.

Second,
Luffy
has this logical sympathy towards
people
without the assurance whether that the something a
person
hold
dear
might
survive.
Luffy
is
strong
so
he
just
can
help
people
, and he identifies with the
people
who
must
suffer from the perception that something dear to them
might
gone
— the
strong
do what they can, and the weak suffer what they
must
.
Luffy
is
strong
and weak at the same time; it’s what
makes
Luffy
still
human
,
even though
it’s a fictional universe.

Luffy
goes to
see
that he
must
not
lose
to protect, and if
possible
,
other
people
don’t
have to
lose
, too. This is
clear
in the
Baroques
Works Saga, when
Luffy
disarmed Miss Wednesday/
Nefertari
Vivi
and to uncover her royal mission and
let
Nico Robin
join
the crew.
Luffy
will always try to befriend. If it’s not
possible
,
Luffy
will try to
make
the
other
person
lose
, as he has done towards his opponents.

Luffy
draws a line between us and them when it
comes
to
losses
. If the said
person
might
lose
something dear to them,
Luffy
will
come
to their aid. If the
person
has nothing to
lose
, and
especially
,
makes
other
people’s
lives
at
risk
, that
person
is the enemy for
Luffy
. With that said,
Luffy
can avoid useless battles against the Marines or
other
pirates
,
even though
the said opponent is weak.

Now
, I don’t
want
to linger on
Luffy
’s
story
anymore
just
because
I have slept through it and
still
didn’t
find
any
other
ways to
continue linger
in his
story
. You
see
, the two
reasons
above are both
sound
reasons
; they can complement each
other
, they can substitute each
other
— they can interact with each
other
. I don’t try to
make
any persuasion here,
but
I
just
want
to vent out my
current
thoughts
on one
small
aspect of leadership (
however
persuasive my words can be).

Now
, what is there to do when there are rival
reasons
, each of them
sounds
towards the audience?
People
has
always in
need
of
reasons
, whether there are any
real
reasons
or not.
Let
’s understand more about reason.

Reasons are, in fact, unnecessary in
action
. What’s necessary is
conviction
, and
conviction
may
only
come
from
reasons
. Don’t
let
this confuse you, as you can
see
that
reason
is the indirect cause of
action
— it doesn’t
directly
influence
action
— and for both to interact with each
other
, they needed the medium of conviction.

What I have been doing right
now
is to gather all the
sound
reasons
to put into
conviction
. It’s like a diesel
machine
; you put solar into them and in turns into energy. Afterwards, all the
reasons
got
burned up into the
conviction
until it doesn’t
matter
anymore
— at least the
human
sense can’t sense its residues anymore.

Now
, to do things with
reason
, you don’t
have to
do any
“real”
things with
reason
. All
reason
can do is to serve as a proof of
story
whether that
story
is being “logical” or not. What are
truly
real
are actions, and what are
truly
logical are actions —
just
like the day of marriage, when your
love
finally
turned into an institution with its
own
rules
and punishment. From actions,
stories
emerge.

But
stories
may emerge from lies as
well
, as lies can
also
be reasonable. Remember that
stories
can
be made
into
reasons
. This is the
reason
to doubt the
reason
of why
Luffy
wants
to be the
pirate
king
— perhaps it’s
just
an intricate lie woven by the lips of
men
,
but
after all
it’s a
work
of
fiction
. What we’re enjoying is a
work
of
fiction
,
yet
we’re
still
convinced of
Luffy
’s
conviction
on becoming the
pirate
king.

All
reasons
, true or false,
are burned
as
fuel
in the
human
conviction
machine
. When the
machine
moved
, whether the
machine
suffers from a more abuse of usage, it won’t
really
matter
as the
human
conviction
machine
can repair itself either
physically
,
emotionally
, mentally, or
spiritually
. Maybe it suffered from the
fuel
known as lies. Maybe the abuse is minimum when the
fuel
is honesty.
Maybe
it won’t
move
when the
fuel
is dishonesty. When the
machine
has already
moved
, the
reason
does
not
matter
— they’re gone into thin air.

Especially
when there are rival
reasons
of
conviction
, all the thing a
human
can do is to disregard those
reasons
and
move
with
conviction
. Movements are natural for
human
, and
thus
enjoyable —
conviction
is enjoyable. As movements and
convictions
are enjoyable to a
human
, it is a
state
of flow where a
person
is experiencing the optimal experience.

Flow happens in street fights, seduction efforts, and in efforts to broaden the erudition. It feels like your brain is working
optimally
, your brain is generating more neurons than
before
, unlike the times you’re
stressed
beyond measure that you choose to space out. Flow cannot
become
the
fuel
of
conviction
as flow is the
state
of being, the phenomenon, observed in
people
with
conviction
. The
human
conviction
machine
cannot
optimally
mix observation and
practice
at the same time (observing
practice
and practicing observation
sounds
about the same in theory,
but
they’re contrasting
practices)
. This is how academia
just
can’t separate between theory and
practice
, since it’s their job to theorize everything into theory, while practitioners are
just
doing it like flipping their hands (except when they’re handicapped).

Now
, to return to our
story
, for
Luffy
, the
reason
doesn’t
really
matter
— or, he can
just
say that there’s no
reason
at all. He would
keep
on beating
Yonkous
on their games ’til he
dies
(the ending nobody
expected
, maybe).
But
, why though,
does
he
have to
beat
Yonkous
? Why
does
he
have to
become
the hero
who
defeated the
Yonkous
? Why should he
become
a hero?

I’ll repeat once,
you dimwit
: the
reason
doesn’t
really
matter
. What mattered is the scale of
conviction
being held
by a
person
. With
conviction
comes
strength, and with strength
comes
power, then responsibility, more power, more responsibility, etc.
Eventually
, you shoulder all the
world
into your body, and the
world
relied on you for whatever you have.

But
interestingly
, you can
only
suck all the
world
when you have a
hole
in you, a space in you
people
can
come
to. At
first
, it
might
come
as an
injury
for you.
But
actually
people
can shelter in it, as the caveman shelters on a cave.
So
, when you imagine yourself as a black
hole
, it means that you can suck things into you, and the things will enjoy it as they
need
a shelter to stay. Imagine the size of an
injury
if you
want
to
hold
all the
people
in the world.

Luffy
fits this requirement
very
well
. He has a
hole
in his heart, which is the
loss
of Ace right in front of him (all the remnants of
Whitebeard
’s crew have this
hole
of
Whitebeard
,
but
we’re
discussing about Luffy
here). As a
story teller
,
Oda
can stretch
Luffy
’s
hole
, for
metaphorically
and
characteristically
,
he’s
the protagonist and the rubber
man
of the
story
. Being this flexible and gains from
injury
, or should I say disorder of the
world
around you, are a set of true
human
superpower — you won’t
need
to
become
a rubber
man
like
Luffy
to
become
a superhero.

All you
need
is an
injury
, and
make
a
story
out of it,
make
a
reason
out of it, and burn it into your
conviction
’til it doesn’t
matter
anymore
(it could
still
matter
so
you can repeat the burning process). This is the
real
undiscovered path of superheroes.
Even though
at
first
, your movements aren’t graceful, you will learn.
Even though
at
first
, you’re not enjoying the ride, you will.
People
will flock to you, celebrate you,
even though
it’s
only
for your existence. They will thank you for being alive.
Sounds
like mass manipulation, I know,
but
if you follow One
Piece
closely
, the
only
meaningful manipulation is the storytelling, and that’s all you
need
to
start
— maybe another
injury
or two.

Now
, I’m not trying to
tell
you what to do,
but
rather
to
show
you that it is
possible
to imitate your idol. All idols
are built
upon
violence
— at least the
injury
or
losses
they already have in their hearts. If you
see
human
violence
as a problem, then you’re a problem, too, for you a
human
as well
.

I cannot
stop
you from viewing
violence
as a problem,
but
I realize that
violence
has always been the
state
of the
human
nature,
sometimes
being
used
,
sometimes
peace
. We have always
lived
in
periods
of war,
periods
of
peace
,
sometimes
with heavy abuse of
violence
,
sometimes
without. The final
use
of
violence
, in every
period
, is to bring an everlasting
peace
with the introduction of prohibition and rituals as the
first
human
institutions. It is
also
prohibition and rituals that made religion
possible
at
first
, enabling longer
periods
of
peace
relative to the observed
period
. The
evolution
of modern
humans
is the
evolution
of institutions: from culture, religion, kingdoms, nation-state, to high technology
companies
.

This modern
evolution
happened in jumps,
namely
the has-never-been-and-will-never-be-
expected
scapegoat
mechanism, in which it doesn’t
matter
whether the
scapegoat
is innocent or not. A hint of responsibility, power, or uniqueness, among the characteristic of the
scapegoat
will be
enough
to determine whether one can be a
scapegoat
(imagine Hitler and the dead Jews).
Scapegoat
mechanism is responsible for all phases of modern
human
evolution
, for it serves as the origin of all
human
institutions.

Now
tell
me again, prior to his death, is Ace guilty or innocent? Is it
wrong
for
Whitebeard
to treat his crew as his family? From the wimpiest to the bulkiest to the manliest of
man
, from the most effeminate to the most tomboy, I have
plenty
friends cried like a baby witnessing the execution of
Portgas
D. Ace, sympathizing with his death — they cried when they read it, and they
usually
read alone
just
because
they don’t know what will happen
next
. It
tells
me that
losses
are universal
human
experience best enjoyed alone (I know, for I cried as
well)
. Everybody can experience
loss
, whether innocent or guilty, whether active or passive; it
really
doesn’t
matter
. The
scapegoat
mechanism has always been that unexpected in having its victims (in Rene
Girard
’s terms, “the surrogate victim”).
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2450 words
6.0
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