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Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.27

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. with this statement? v. 27
Nowadays, the computer has become an indispensable device in our lives. Many people think that these machines are the most crucial developments of the last centuries. I strongly agree with that statement, and this essay will support my view. Firstly, the computer helps us work more quickly and effectively. This is because computer has the ability to communicate quickly throughout the email service, that leads to a lot of information can be delivered in a short time. Moreover, the invention of the laptop, which can be carried slightly between every place, enables us to work at anywhere. In addition, the appearance of the software on the computer which supports the video call function assists people to work from home and corporate with other people effortlessly. To take one example, in some pandemic situations like Covid-19 pandemic, people just need to stay at home and use their computers to work instead of moving to the company. Secondly, those computers give the community a great way to learn. In fact, there are many study resources on the internet which can be found by using the computers, that creates a big chance for everyone who pursues self-study. Furthermore, thanks to some online learning systems, teachers and their student can correspond better, as a result, the education quality will be improved. For example, when students have some questions, they can use the computer to search for the problems, or directly ask their tutors via the online system. In conclusion, there are many important inventions which extremely help us in many aspects of our lives. However, with those aforementioned benefits, computers can be supposed to be the best inventions over centuries.
Nowadays, the computer has become an indispensable device in our
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lives
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Many
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people
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think
that these machines are the most crucial developments of the last centuries. I
strongly
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agree
with that statement, and this essay will support my view.

Firstly
, the computer
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helps
us
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work
more
quickly
and
effectively
. This is
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because
computer has the ability to communicate
quickly
throughout the email service, that leads to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
information can
be delivered
in a short time.
Moreover
, the invention of the laptop, which can
be carried
slightly
between every place, enables us to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
at anywhere.
In addition
, the appearance of the software on the computer which supports the video call function assists
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
from home and corporate with other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
effortlessly
. To take one example, in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
pandemic situations like Covid-19 pandemic,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
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just
need to stay at home and
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use
their computers to
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work
instead
of moving to the
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company
.

Secondly
, those computers give the community a great way to learn. In fact, there are
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many
study resources on the internet which can
be found
by using the computers, that creates a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
chance for everyone who pursues self-study.
Furthermore
, thanks to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
online learning systems, teachers and their student can correspond better,
as a result
, the education quality will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
.
For example
, when students have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
questions, they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the computer to search for the problems, or
directly
ask their tutors via the online system.

In conclusion
, there are
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many
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important
inventions which
extremely
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help
us in
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many
aspects of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.
However
, with those aforementioned benefits, computers can
be supposed
to be the best inventions over centuries.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. with this statement? v. 27

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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