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Computers are becoming an essential part of school lessons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

Due to technological advancement, computers academic work haves become a necessary portion in academic work. The main pros of this view is that studies become interesting for students it becomes easy when it comes to interest in theirof their study whereas the one con is that they suffer from eye diseases. This essay agrees that demerits of this view surpass the merits is very obvious and the both sides will be substantiated in the upcoming paragraphs. To begin with, computers have become (part and parcel) the most important part of our day to day life. Nowadays, schools prefer online work, so it is a cup of tea for students to access anything like homework, any chapters and notes. For example, teachers send notes via email so pupils can see them anytime and anywhere. Secondly, Computers create an interest in for students about their schooling which means they can see videos and others’ reviews on the google and they can remember and understand better. To illustrate, pupils can use Youtube and Wwikipedia for their study which is more eye-catchingeye catching and easy to keep in their mind. On the other hand, The there is a major demerit is that youth suffers from different diseases from anthe early age. Although, pupils rely on technology as it is more eye catching, youngsters endure with lack of visibility. For example, a survey of the United states in 2017 says that 63. 37% people have to wear eye glasses from childhood because of excess usage of computers. . Besides, obesity is one of the major problems in of this current time. Students spend more more time on computers as it is more interesting and they feel like they do not need to work physically when it is possible to do all tasks on laptops. For example, in the US, it can be seen you can see there is an overweight person per 3 persons which is caused due to obesity has created by laptops and computers. To conclude, this view carries both benefits and drawbacks. Although, it is so beneficial for people when it comes to the academicto academic part where you can remember things easily, the negative impacts obesity surpasses all the advantages.
Due to technological advancement, computers academic
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. The main pros of this view is that studies
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become
interesting for
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easy when it
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obvious and the both sides will
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part of our
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day to day
life. Nowadays, schools prefer online
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,
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it is a cup of tea for
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students
to access anything like homework, any chapters and notes.
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, teachers
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send
notes via
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email
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so
pupils can
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see
them anytime and anywhere.
Secondly
, Computers create an interest in for
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about their schooling which means they can
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see
videos
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and others
’ reviews on the
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google and
they can remember and understand better. To illustrate, pupils can
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use
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Youtube
and
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Wwikipedia
for their study which is more
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catching and easy to
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in their mind.

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early age. Although, pupils rely on technology as it is more eye catching, youngsters endure with lack of visibility.
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, a survey of the
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United states
in 2017 says that 63. 37%
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people
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have to
wear eye glasses from childhood
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because
of excess usage of computers.
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Besides
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current
time.
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spend
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time on computers as it is more
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interesting and
they feel like they do not need to
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physically
when it is possible to do all tasks on laptops.
For example
, in the US, it can be
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seen
you can
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see
there is an overweight person per 3 persons which
is caused
due to obesity has created by laptops and computers.

To conclude
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beneficial for
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when it
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academic part where you can remember things
easily
, the
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obesity surpasses all the advantages.

IELTS essay Computers are becoming an essential part of school lessons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

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369 words
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